no stress

[Ka0t1c]

what drives you to go further than you have ever imagined
to turn your purpose into a certain passion
to serve us with such perfect determination eternally lastin
to alert by the masses, well observe my demonstration usin my personal magic

but it's no illusion, just know my tools are more basic than gadgets
cuz i don't want confusion, so if you could relate i'm glad - it's
that great of a reaction i do wait to adapt to - you should
update with new data and escape out the habit of exaggerating

exact or estimating, that's not better than to add on and make extra
fuel to your tank: your juice thru the battle
cuz you are ranked at a number two which aint your fate
now make what ya can handle or bad news they will break...

* prepare for the worst
and be aware what is there
don't carry the curse
or you'll tear out your hair

[neversnooze]

the first two verses were strong statements."what caught my eye was' the metaphor you used with magic and illusion got my attention. the flow for the first two was there and so was the meaning. the strength of the 3rd and 4th verse/chorus was toned down, it got less interesting. They should be worked on with more syllabus, it looks like you were trying to finish it up after the 2nd verse. if you could repair the last 2 verses, i could give it atleast an 8.

6.5/10

[Ka0t1c]

more syllables??? but i see you rated it bad neways... but do u mean switch the pattern up? cuz i'm using the same rhyme scheme throughout...

[gutawafang]

quite a good way of rhyming. good explorations and yeah, the way you rhyme inspired me. Not bad dude.

but yeah, flow was all over. i give it 6.

[Slim Zaddy]

NeverSnooze sums everything i want to say ,, you start solid , then start to fall off.. i hve seen you write much better ,i know this is not your best ,,