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Random Freestyle

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Re: Random Freestyle

Postby J_cuz » Apr 15th, '09, 20:17

And I will leech and standout to you like an infected parasite,
Like a fresh faced Emcee standing speechless n disrespected at the mic.

While under the spotlight, attempting to avoid the stage fright
As he fumbles and stutters to find the words to fit just right.

He’s nervous but he knows no one stands in his way but him
I guess this is just how his unfolding story of his life begins.


this bit showed real remorse and let go but id change the last line to this

I guess what im tryin to say is this is how his life begins
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Re: Random Freestyle

Postby J_cuz » Apr 15th, '09, 23:09

not bad tho bro, abit iffey ere and there but ok i guess, i do like the last bit
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