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L.I.F.E pt.2

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L.I.F.E pt.2

Postby mista slimy » Apr 22nd, '09, 10:00

some months ago, some boring day, i was tryna type something.. just look at it :)


things are lookin up
they're sayin this shit every single day to us
so i prefer to turn this channel off and go to Mass
cuz it's betta to me to feel the church's cold walls
than listen to you fuckers without two lil' balls
i don't give a shit bout what'chu doin or not to make me feel betta
cuz i know u will do nuthin but stanky ass shit, by the way
all i want is spread ma wings and fly away
being far from reality and feel sumptin new
have some friends, sun above and a lovely boo
mundane things wants to catch us in their trap
we live once so don't make ur life an endless nap, cuz
outta door lots of rumors about urself, and
u'd betta be careful cuz each can be 'notha Don Self
they tryna sell u every worthless shit they got
they can't find their tongues so they're like
shuttin their fuckin mouths, but
they open'em when there's sumthin in sight to seize
to be tha leader in the whole world bizz !!
if ya want to beat'em you got ta be quick
have some big head, large balls and dick
to pimp them hoes around the globe
drive fancy cars and wear flossy clothes
tricky problem - wut tha fuck iz thizz ?
when u got money, villas and booty chickz
ya think no one can shut ur golden muzzle
u're wrong cuz they got them glocks
one shot, nuthin but a crumblin rocks
smell of death's waftin all around
media's gonna getcha layin on the ground
one mo', it doesn't matta, if u're a big fish or some silent mouse
u can be easily dragged outta your fuckin house
i wish i could be ova this shit that happens today
havin a stroll wit my girlfriend day by fuckin day
seein them big planes floatin thru the air
screamin on the bridge " hell yeahhh " and
fuck you fuckin liars " doin " good things fo us
i wish i could kick ya fuckin stanky ass
and fuck yo fuckin postulates u sissiez out there
hope devil will handle with y'all in the god damn hell...
mista slimy
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Re: L.I.F.E pt.2

Postby neversnooze » Apr 22nd, '09, 14:50

Sorry mista slimy,

the flow was off by alot! There is hardly any multies in this piece. personally, when i was reading this write it just dragged and i stopped half way.

all i can say is keep on writing and better construct your piece. before you write put your ideas together first rather than freeversing.
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Re: L.I.F.E pt.2

Postby gutawafang » Apr 25th, '09, 17:54

I barely could rap it out. It sounds like LIFE to me, haha. Cool expressions here and there. Good man. :y:
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