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Love Me With Your Spikes (working title)

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Love Me With Your Spikes (working title)

Postby TheWeirdoIsBack » Apr 14th, '09, 23:44

[Chorus]
Throw it all away just like you did with me/
Your razorblade words cut me so deep/
I'm done with this shit I can't stand to see your face/
Fuck it all I'm about to catch a self-murder case/

[Verse 1]
The words you spoke were sharper than the knife that poked/
Me in the wrist and the vein it broke/
The blood I drew was better than you/
And helped my life more than you could do/
I know I'm fucked up but thanks for trying/
All your effort just left me crying/
I may seem fine but inside I'm dying/
When I say I'm over it know that I'm lying/
I keep pressing on I honestly am trying/
But the longer I delay the more reasons I'm finding/
To finally stop writing and just take action/
Scream fuck the world and reach ultimate satisfaction/
It's for the best I promise for the better/
Before I go just read my last letter/
Give me a thought and forget our past/
It's my fucking fault you couldn't last/

[Chorus]
Throw it all away just like you did with me/
Your razorblade words cut me so deep/
I'm done with this shit I can't stand to see your face/
Fuck it all I'm about to catch a self-murder case/

[Verse 2]
You picked me up and I brought you down/
No wonder you didn't want me around/
I can't control my mood I'm sorry for that/
My mind wants to kill me with panic attacks/
I told you when we met I'm fucked in the head/
Many people tried but gave up in the end/
You claimed you were different just as they had said/
I can't believe I bought that shit again/
Half a year you must have wasted sorry for your time/
Forget me and all my trouble your no longer mine/
I thought I held love for you that's what I believed/
My feelings peaked when you decided to leave/
I don't mean to pass blame but you fucked my heart/
I thought I knew love but now I'm back at start/
What is it when your beloved just gives up/
I believe it's called never giving a fuck/

[Chorus]
Throw it all away just like you did with me/
Your razorblade words cut me so deep/
I'm done with this shit I can't stand to see your face/
Fuck it all I'm about to catch a self-murder case/
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Re: Love Me With Your Spikes (working title)

Postby gutawafang » Apr 20th, '09, 03:43

Fucking emotional. i felt the shit man.

but yeah, flow should be worked on. and ESPECIALLY your multis man. :y:
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Re: Love Me With Your Spikes (working title)

Postby TheWeirdoIsBack » Apr 26th, '09, 02:53

gutawafang wrote:Fucking emotional. i felt the shit man.

but yeah, flow should be worked on. and ESPECIALLY your multis man. :y:



Thanks man, glad I was able to make an impact :D
My flow always ends up strange, I've been trying to fix it for years haha. Thanks for checking though, hopefully next time it'll flow a lot better :y: :flower:
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