very proud of this

[mceddie]

i think this verse i wrote is the best ive done

my thoughts are whats tought to not be praised
they get caught in a knot of a man gone crazed
just at the fact that im still alive, im amazed
but motherfucker dont ever question how i was raised

takes alot for a guy like me to not seep through and be seen
because every body questions my wellbeing and says that im obscene
well why dont you just light a match, drench me in gasoline, flourine, and spark the kerosene
they downgraded me to caffeine cause i couldnt handle all the morphine


so they strapped me down on the stretcher, said i was to much of a stressor
a real genuine depressor, but was set free by the nurse after i made a mess of her
but dont be fooled im not as crazy as they make me out to be
if i were i wouldnt be able to put words together so perfectly

see ill ignite and light this dynamite with this sulfite, wether its wrong or right
burn down your house at midnight, just to watch you and your family frantic in fright
call it sick, i call it slapstick, cause i know my words are caustic
so approach with caution, cause im droppin bombs that are catastrophic



any opinions greatly appreciated

[shadyblue]

thats sick.

but no lyrics sound good to me compared to 3AM now :P

although thats clearly not a criticism of you haha

[mceddie]

thats sick.

but no lyrics sound good to me compared to 3AM now :P

although thats clearly not a criticism of you haha

hahaha ive been writing for a month, please, id never want to be compared to em

yeah, but thanks man

[Solace]

I thought it was okay...Its good to see you have good vocabulary at least. Flow was iffy to me. I felt the multies should have been more apparent and smooth. Keep at it tho dude

[mceddie]

I thought it was okay...Its good to see you have good vocabulary at least. Flow was iffy to me. I felt the multies should have been more apparent and smooth. Keep at it tho dude

thanks man, i know the flow seems wierd but it fits...sometimes you get it to fit right, if you know what i mean.

[Solace]

I thought it was okay...Its good to see you have good vocabulary at least. Flow was iffy to me. I felt the multies should have been more apparent and smooth. Keep at it tho dude

thanks man, i know the flow seems wierd but it fits...sometimes you get it to fit right, if you know what i mean.

Yeah I know, because you did have many internal rhymes that fixed the flow a bit.