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Insomniac

Postby Spyder » May 1st, '09, 21:16

new alter ego, basically got it cuz i cant sleep for shit lol
feedback much appreciated :y:

My scripts incripted unlimited damage inflicted
hands like a whip it, and spill blood like a crip hit.
Gettin chased by the poilce for the invasion of hoes jeeps
winnin the race receivin trophies while im runnin on both knees,
cuz solely your not the only homie that acts phony
you cant play me or like singular wireless roll-me.
Thrash angels and demons if you believe in such a thing
and if not you can leave the ring like a seasonal fling.
my Raps wrap Round your Radical Resemblance
Retirin Retards Repeatadly Remainin Restless.
I unconsciously tap into your conscience
replace you sane thought with nonsense
slur your words and leave you thoughtless.
Ill crouch down and spring up on the attack
ready to snap, until i crack your vertebrae in half
but leave your fuckin entire back intact.
showin this anorexic fatty the most proper erection inspection
and had her buckin like an epileptic and a strobe light convention
I'll be unleashin this beast to feast of your girls yeast
got you beggn please for me to cease givn you this disease.


the craziest individual preformin rituals to end it
the laziest hypercritical literal critic to represent
Willin to kill when I ain't feelin your lenient skill ,
pullin the cap back while you stand conveniently still.
You can't fathom the back spasm i've been havin
rough actin? tough like Tinactin? try to quit rappin
I'm an atheist who gets plagued against, enraged at
cuz i told the church we were placed here by space aliens.
muzzled in a mausoleum like I was in Silence of the Lambs
you got a riot on your hands, radiations the climate of the land.
You'll regret whats been said when your left dead
you inbred, might as well shut up, your lyrics been said.
you might as well close your mouth u got no one to rhyme to
cuz your talkin to an Insomniac whos killed more than swine flu.
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Re: Insomniac

Postby MC Anonymous » May 1st, '09, 22:38

Your style reminds me of someones... :shifty:
LMFAO@ Brittney, bitch looking worse than a chupacabra mixed with a broken down coyote. You're disgusting ugly, so ugly in fact, my brain simultaneously exploded while processing how bitterly grotesque you look. I would much rather stick ice picks into the walls of my cranium, then stick my dick into your quagmire of a clitoris. You're what would happen if a sperm whale mated with a Godzilla fish..


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Re: Insomniac

Postby Spyder » May 1st, '09, 23:09

haha nawww, but did u like it?
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Re: Insomniac

Postby Fa-Q » May 2nd, '09, 01:14

I like the biggie 3 word play...good verse(s)
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Re: Insomniac

Postby Solace » May 2nd, '09, 02:28

Dope, really dope, but I feel the same way as Anonymous. Felt like a big erm "influence" to put it in nicer words.
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Re: Insomniac

Postby Spyder » May 3rd, '09, 00:52

well perhaps i guess, but thanks for the positive feedback :y:
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