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Rhyme struck

Postby mcZu » May 12th, '09, 19:10

A freestyle/keystyle like piece I did on Big L's ''Street Struck'', took me 6 min...so I dunno if I'm allowed to call it a freestyle/keystyle :-k Anyways; feedback appreciated, as always.

I’m an animal, animated vandal, a killer mental;
Vigilante stealth, vicious opposite of health;
Eyes panorama, view everything I state like Nevada;
Blood on paper when I’m in vain; like a bandana,
Pen the antenna, abandon the bandwagon and a;
Ferocious punch, with a heroic hunch, got heroin like lunch;
Because I’m dope and hungry, try to tempt me;
And the pen turns into Ted Bundy, technically
You can’t offend me, unless you try to rap against me;
Can’t test me; like a college graduate,
Gladly degrading you fools with rhyming bait;
Flying mind state; orbit less, nor bit shit, I score shit yess.
Just call me Maradona; I’ll marry Madonna,
So I can give ya’ll rhyming hard candy, met a don and I;
Got asked-a-bar by Pablo; tha flow seems mad though
Answered with lines; dope once yess, but no intoxicators
Rhymes aligned with toxic indicators; cyanide levitators,
Fiya-lines intimidators; stop being imitators,
I’m a liberator with words; victorious rated in each verse,
Stimulator, stinging like sting; so fuck hiphop police –yeah I cursed,
Vindicator with vengeance, beast like a gator,
Beat ripper like the Whitechapel raper; you’ll land-on
The ground fucked up like a strap-on; my sound slaps-son-
Blood-stained this old-school tape, ‘bout to pull it out like a tampon…
"Truth is limitless in its range; if you drop a 'T' and look at it in reverse, it could hurt."
- Lupe Fiasco

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Re: Rhyme struck

Postby JMG » May 15th, '09, 08:47

nice lyrics and flow keep it up
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