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Old Freestyle

Postby Young Luc » May 28th, '09, 01:14

this was a freestyle i made about a month ago.

Young Luc wrote:yo fuck wit me i'll stab yu with a dagger
im a whiteboy but i still have swagger
they jealous cuz my engine making loud noise
and the fact that im one of life's proud boys
if yu offer me wine imma reply "i dont drink wine dude"
i will bust your ass with a fuckin nine dude
i must mention that i eat fine food
when yu meet me yu will notice imma kind dude
offer me drugs i will recline you
your bitch is now mine too
my flows getting sicker, i must have caught the swine flu


FEEDBACK.... i think im slowly, slowly getting better
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Re: Old Freestyle

Postby Acid_M » May 28th, '09, 01:19

freestyle as in off the top of the dome? Not writtens? If so then its not bad but if this is written then you still need a lot of work.

Which is it?
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Re: Old Freestyle

Postby Young Luc » May 28th, '09, 01:21

Acid_M wrote:freestyle as in off the top of the dome? Not writtens? If so then its not bad but if this is written then you still need a lot of work.

Which is it?


its not written, FREESTYLE :)
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Re: Old Freestyle

Postby Acid_M » May 28th, '09, 01:23

good shit then dude
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Re: Old Freestyle

Postby Slim Zaddy » May 28th, '09, 12:37

it's good man , i liked it
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z_em = Slim Zaddy = Zaid AQ which is my real name
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