Ready For War Part. 2

[classthe_king]

He's my updated version. I tried to fix the million mistakes Mc Anonymous pointed out.

My crazy flow admits decay to your brain like it’s radioactive
May we go back if my Jurassic rap hits back wit that raptor madness
Take a daily dose o’ that shit come back in in a black jacket
Walk up to Kent, smack him, pull out my hatchet and start to hack shit
Get yo fuckin ass whipped you fuckin faggot, you’re like a fascist cause style is classless
Am I that sick that my anti-wack tactics reel you in like the bass master classic
I’ll take a glass brick and smash it right over Patrick
Fuckin faggot I wouldn’t sell out even if you pay me
I’ll take me and Israeli to the white house
Knock the lights out and tell him to go crazy
I’m on the titanic causin mass panic
Headin right into an iceberg tryin to find Atlantis
This isn’t how I wanted to be I didn’t plan it
I just woke up one day and said I can stand it
“God Damn it ma, im going to get some bandage gauze,”
“Walk up to that mother fucker punch em in the fuckin face,”
“Whip his fuckin ass and ask him how my knuckles taste.”

Your hope I devastate, and nope I’ll neva taste the pain you’ve tasted
Or the blood, sweat and tears that you’ve wasted
Throw me the best you got homie ive faced it
The broken rhymes in my unspoken mind have been pasted
Together to form this clever storm, ive made it rain
And if you lost it all then you’ve played the game
Standin on a hill of eighty slain rappers
Bendin over backwards just to get you to say my name
Metaphorically, cause you focused to back then
Cause historically I ain’t supposed to happen
They’ve distorted me so you wouldn’t want to be exposed to rappin
And it worries me cause ive been roastin n’ attackin
These motha fuckin suckas yeah I’ve released the beast
The peace has ceased ive greased the feast and im read-y to eat
Im beneath defeat and ready to rise up from underneath the streets

I float around this rap game like it’s a ghost town
Talk shit bitch and this ass whoopin will go down
You know now that if you say one word or try to blow down
This whole town will find you, get you and throw down
I can bury you so down in the ground the moles can’t find you
Spit this fuckin venom in your face and blind you
Grab my football pads and blind side you
And have you spin in circles but the whole time im behind you
I’ll divide you in eighteen places so to make me say this
Ill repaint your house like trading spaces
Battling you rapper is like grading papers
Make a few comments, throw away the haters
And scare you mother fuckers to death like fading faces
Say shit and I’ll give your whole life a facelift
Take all the work you’ve done and disgrace it
If you think anyone has ever praised it
I’ll daze it in so many ways it will make your whole game quit

[DaKidLilj]

wow man...i never enjoyed reading a rap more than that 1...idk if u want dis...

My favorites in order...
2nd Verse
3rd Verse
1st Verse...

2nd verse blew me away n the third verse was crazy...1st was still sick tho but i mean dat 2nd one just wowed the hell outta me

keep up the good work man...do u spit them n make audio files or no? or can u only write n not actually rap? lol

[JMG]

damn pretty dope

[classthe_king]

wow thanks! And actually i can rap it pretty good too (So my friends say) but im not really the computer guy and would have no clue how to make a beat for it or record it.

[MC Anonymous]

Good job with the improvement. I see some flaws in flow also; unneeded 1 syllable words can really make or break the flow in a piece such as this. Structure seemed to improve..although verse 1 was all over the place, verse two had the best structure, and verse 3 had better structure then verse 1. Multies were nice, wordplay was iight..nothing really eye opening. Good job dude. 7.5/10

You have AIM or MSN?

[Ka0t1c]

you have potential, i still see some fractures and some parts threw me off but i see you got a good vocab with good ideas on how to use your words, keep improving

[classthe_king]

Thanks again, I just have one question, does each line have to be the same amount of syllables, ive been wondering that but im to lazy to count the syllables in each of eminem's lines.

And yes i have aim.

[MC Anonymous]

Thanks again, I just have one question, does each line have to be the same amount of syllables, ive been wondering that but im to lazy to count the syllables in each of eminem's lines.

And yes i have aim.

PM me it that way I can help you better.