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Another Song I Wrote Yesterday

Postby James R. » Jun 10th, '09, 01:09

So I wrote this last night, but didn't wanna post it since I just posted something earlier in the afternoon, but I figured why not. It's still pretty evident to me that I'm coming out of a block, but fuck it, I hope you guys enjoy.

I can’t take these nonsense concepts or the nonstop non-thoughts
Produced by the onslaught of non-threats
This ain’t a contest when I step in it
Cuz homie I’m the shit just try not to step in it
You fakers set the gimmicks y’all stuck inside scene
Again and again the end justifies the means
I’ll buck and fry your team just for testing my bounds
I’ll leave your dawgs all hurt, have ‘em left in the pound
I rep for my town and I stand tall for my crew
Don’t think you can diss me and not all of my crew
The blood shed will be a wreck, leave it all over you
But in the end what could you honestly do?
I’m flowin so natural smooth the traction you lose
Couldn’t be regained if you were usin gallons of glue
You’ll never make it cuz you don’t know how to be true
While my style’s turning fallacies true

Rappers slappin a label on anything and sellin it
The whack rap pit fall, the game must have fell in it
All I bring to the table is rhymes for y’all to revel in
Your time’s so irrelevant it’s time for me to settle it
I’m like history happenin too fast for the present to grasp
I see the past before it’s passed I must have said it too fast
I missed the game til now and you set it for trash
You think I’m jokin well I’m telling your ass
I eat these rappers like Hansel and Grettle’s my fam
If your style is hot then shit my level is damn
My pen and pad is like God let it rest in his hands
Flow so relaxed it’s like I’m on a sedative man
Your shit is hot now, but time is relative son
But my shit is eternity, that’s forever and some
I’m killin the game wit these lyrics redder then rum
My whack is better than most your best is better than some

3rd verse is like hearse and the coffin they revert back to coughin
Cut the grass leave em in dirt ‘fore they blossom
I aint fuckin wit these kids I’m no Johnson and Johnson
They can’t stay in pace I say I lost ‘em too often
I do this all just to see the look on your face
When you hear my voice on the snare and I’m pushin the bass
Every subliminal line I’m bringin straight to your eyes
You can’t keep your cool when you’re facin demise
You rap cats best be stayin inside, playin it wise
I already see my place in your mind
Top 5 hot rhymes freeze time cause jams in cocked 9’s
Whose grind is slippin? Not mine
Honestly askin how don’t you see this prodigy passin
95% the names that you’re probably blastin
Who’s hot as me? That aint a thought to be answered
Honestly man… I might as well stop it at that shit
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Re: Another Song I Wrote Yesterday

Postby Ka0t1c » Jun 10th, '09, 01:14

good lyrics some clever lines, that's a B+ in my book :worship:
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Another Song I Wrote Yesterday

Postby Spyder » Jun 10th, '09, 20:00

pretty tight shit sir, i loved some of the lines in there but over i did like the other one better :whistle: but both of them were good so keep it up :y:
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Re: Another Song I Wrote Yesterday

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jun 10th, '09, 20:54

sick as usual man ,, i enjoyed reading it James,, glad you back here bro ,, we need some good staff round here ,, i liked your vocab and it flowed dope ,, concept is great ,, it's pretty nice ,, actually i enjoyed this more ,, than writer block , keep it up bro :y:
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Re: Another Song I Wrote Yesterday

Postby James R. » Jun 10th, '09, 22:08

Thanks for checkin guys. I'm probably less confident in this one because there wasn't the same feeling of inspiration, but i like them both (which is cool cuz i haven't liked a track I've written in quite some time) so that's progress. Thanks for checkin it out guys.
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Re: Another Song I Wrote Yesterday

Postby James R. » Jun 12th, '09, 13:56

60+ views and only 4 comments? Come on, I know it's not my best, but I'd still appreciate the feedback :flower:
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Re: Another Song I Wrote Yesterday

Postby Noeezy » Jun 14th, '09, 12:39

damn you trample em wit this sick shit, in comparison i'd say cannabalistic
they can't handle it this quick there is some but they cant stand up to this hit
lol.. bored

seriously though, if i had a label i'd sign you right now :y:
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Re: Another Song I Wrote Yesterday

Postby James R. » Jun 14th, '09, 16:54

^Hahah thanks bro
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Re: Another Song I Wrote Yesterday

Postby James R. » Jun 14th, '09, 17:51

Hahah thanks man I appreciate you checkin it out.
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