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Which Path

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Which Path

Postby JPearson » Jul 22nd, '09, 19:49

this verse is bout being in a relationship that u know is going bad and its time to either end it or work at it to keep the relationship goin...

Separate ways, there’s two different paths that we could take
Now we could take the same one or hope they both lead onto fate
It’s up to us, it ain’t something one of can choose
‘cause we both gotta walk down one we should wear each others shoes
And see what it feels like walking in them at this time
We need to open up our minds, so I know yours and you know mine
And we can figure out the way that’s best for both our lives to lead
The one that we wanna walk down might not be the one we need
It don’t seem fair to have the feelings that we have and make this choice
There’s nothing I can say to change it, no use in my voice
It’s our decision, I want to take direction with precision
Either we end it all now or wen can live our future vision
And I’m angry at the thought that me and you have got to here
‘cause we’re perfect for each other, didn’t think this time would even near
But now it’s here, and it’s time for us to decide what’ll happen
Stay together or break up, keep our heart strong or have it flattened…
It will be like finding a nail in a coal mine
haystack
oh... like finding a haystack in a coal mine
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Re: Which Path

Postby gutawafang » Jul 23rd, '09, 20:00

SLMacDougall wrote:not as good as some of ur other stuff, but was still okay.

I agree. I couldn't flow that well man. :happy:
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Re: Which Path

Postby JPearson » Jul 23rd, '09, 20:22

if it was on audio id show u how if flowed, one thing i make sure all my lyrics do... i'l rework it then cheers fr feedback :y:
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