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Gotta Get Mine CHECK THIS!!!!!!

Postby Cookzee » Jul 25th, '09, 15:24

i wrote to that sinima collab - Gotta Get Mine - you guys can check it on WWW.MYSPACE.COM/COOKZEE

i have given up luck
im thru given a fuck
i wanna play lifes cards
god u dealin or what?!
it's like
a nastier plan
made by a nastier man
thru beatin chicks of death
imma grab me a fan
an go berserk
all over his shirt
like nobody heard
of the murd-ers
i committed
thru 2000 n third
michaels back
rockin it on a sinima beat
u spit real in the booth
but u aint real on the streets
you just repeat what you've seen
an the demon in me
is ready to be released
so i'll let him speak
(PITCH DOWN)
FOLLOW ME
get hyped
get whilin
since the days N.W.A split
hell has been silent
(PITCH NORMAL)
he gets scared
an starts dialin
just when he realised
that im right behind him
with this knife shining
so bright it's so blindin
i proceed to chop him up
an make big meal from his eyelids
but we the same person
fightin for the purpose
two very different ego's
wid insane cursin
we leave more mens sperm
than on waynes curtain!
lil faggot
snortin cane
like it aint hurtin



leave people like
what has Cookzee said
well Cookzee's cred
is gon down
whats rong in his head
he's a suprise for ya bastards
Cookzee's dead
an he's never comin back
im taken his name
an his bread
comin back from he grave
the one who has made
his fan base
stable as what it stands today
im the man today
another man would say
i aint shit
but know this for real
your man is fake
SINIMA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
survival is taught by the survivors, not by those who benefitted.
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Re: Gotta Get Mine CHECK THIS!!!!!!

Postby gutawafang » Jul 25th, '09, 16:04

HONESTly, they're basic rhymes. It's quite good, it does flow well. :)
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Re: Gotta Get Mine CHECK THIS!!!!!!

Postby Cookzee » Jul 25th, '09, 16:07

thank you :y: tbh, complex rhymes can work sometimes but usually simple rhymes own, mainly coz the person doesn't need a fucking dictionary to find out what you just said :happy:
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Re: Gotta Get Mine CHECK THIS!!!!!!

Postby gutawafang » Jul 25th, '09, 16:11

Cookzee wrote:thank you :y: tbh, complex rhymes can work sometimes but usually simple rhymes own, mainly coz the person doesn't need a fucking dictionary to find out what you just said :happy:

Keep doing it homie. Keep posting your stuff here. I'll feed when I'm free. :y:
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