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Kidnapping Verse

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Kidnapping Verse

Postby JPearson » Jul 26th, '09, 04:07

Hope this verse ain't my actual feelings :p

I see you walking down the road you’re alone so I’m gonna follow
It’s already dark now but you ain’t gonna see tomorrow
And I’ll feel no sorrow, when I leave your body hollow
You need a helping hand now I’m here but ain’t got one you can borrow
‘cause both my hands are full, one with a weapon one with your arm
That I grabbed when I crept up on ya, don’t struggle bitch stay calm
I ain’t tryna get caught so I don’t need a raised alarm
Just wanna kidnap you by force I ain’t tryna use my charm
So now I have ya you ain’t going I’ll take you home and tie you up
Don’t try your luck and try escaping bitch you’re in my eye you’re stuck
There ain’t no getting out now, your life is all mine now you’re fucked
You should’ve seen me coming at ya, should’ve seen the knife I tucked
But you didn’t, so I took the chance and watched you leave
And when I saw you weren’t with anyone I pounced and grabbed your sleeve
I’m gonna take your life now that we’re alone you best believe
I ain’t gonna give you mercy, hurt and pain’s what you’ll receive
It will be like finding a nail in a coal mine
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oh... like finding a haystack in a coal mine
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Re: Kidnapping Verse

Postby drasticlyhated » Jul 26th, '09, 11:41

lol i hope its not how your feeling ether :o otherwise that was good pretty sweet dude how do you right this stuff?lol :b: :b:
the shit i do most doers never done
ima fuck this beat ya bitch
you better come, better run this shit
i dont run from shit, i still b-beay
your ass like a fuckin drum stick
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Re: Kidnapping Verse

Postby Xray » Jul 27th, '09, 11:15

Concept I like, the idea I like, but the lyrics are very basic. Most probably because your vocab isn't so good, just do what I used to do, and try using words you don't use much. Or read the dictionary more, and expand your vocab. Other than that it was cool.
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Over a billion bullets shooting from the chopper's arm
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Re: Kidnapping Verse

Postby JPearson » Jul 27th, '09, 18:37

lol what u wanna hear from me then? Love, violent kidnapping n drugs are done... what more do people like!? :p yer i know i could use more vocab, rreally dont know why i dont, cheers for the feed though :y:
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Re: Kidnapping Verse

Postby drasticlyhated » Jul 27th, '09, 18:41

rap about bums lol jk idk rap bout whut comes to mind :b:
the shit i do most doers never done
ima fuck this beat ya bitch
you better come, better run this shit
i dont run from shit, i still b-beay
your ass like a fuckin drum stick
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Re: Kidnapping Verse

Postby ritchieA » Jul 27th, '09, 22:03

ha jamie u sick bastard lol jkz we do cum up wid some weird shit lol but it was gd :p
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