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A Hill i Cant Climb

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A Hill i Cant Climb

Postby Le Tunisien » Jul 23rd, '09, 23:48

sometimes i rhyme,tryna find my crime

between my lines,or just behind my mind

its maybe a hill,that i cant climb

i got those skills,and imma go blind

this shit kills,am i wastin my time

i might go on pills,im not that kind

probably i will....its gonna be fine

this life is hard,u gotta be smart

flip your cards,add to your Cart

play that part,of course with ur heart

or shit would start,to fkn go Far

could leave u scarred,hitten with a dart

words written to spark,violent as a shark


:smoking: :happy: :)
Last edited by Le Tunisien on Jul 24th, '09, 00:09, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: A Hill i Cant Climb

Postby Le Tunisien » Jul 24th, '09, 00:07

SLMacDougall wrote:lol was good, but the words retard, and fart killed it :sweating:

thought so xD kk will replace it Lol :y:

edit: done
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Re: A Hill i Cant Climb

Postby Solace » Jul 27th, '09, 16:00

This is a poem right? Pretty decent nothing that made me think "Oh that's deep;clever"

Keep at it.
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Re: A Hill i Cant Climb

Postby gutawafang » Jul 27th, '09, 17:07

Pretty good and DIRECT. Doesn't require hard thinking like a REALLY poetic one should. It's cool, nevertheless. :y:
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Re: A Hill i Cant Climb

Postby ritchieA » Jul 27th, '09, 22:12

that was gd i liked it :)
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