Scarred - LazyTown (NEW)

[Ice_Scarred]

Sorry if it ain't that good. Just me experimenting with different flows, rhyme schemes, and stuff. Its way out of the normal for me, so bear with me. Some stuff just came to my head, and I started writing it down. I was listening to Drake and Max B / French Montana, so I guess I could've been inspired by it. Feedback still appreciated though!

The lines follow an odd pattern, if you can catch the flow, your good, if you can't, i'm sorry


Yo, I run track like its Combat, hit you 20 sum times, bomb like I pop gats/
Nah its for fun, black, candy coated Sunshine, heat over twin packs/
Twin Towers, bombed sour, may they rest in peace, leap over Jesse James, matter fact Gwen O'Keith/
Teeth buttering like Toast jam, and you out of yeast, better break a leg, you ain't breakin bread, without the meat/
Shit, I just bumped Drake, Montana, Max, maxed out my school zone like I'm dealin rats/
I can't stop the O-zone from attacking back, pop out the orbit, sun shining through your chest/
Burnin up, burn slow this time, let the joint go, pop the weasel over straps, killing men over lats/
I ain't a cop, thug, gangsta, or a dealer, but I got a fresh pack of Sneeze gas that'll make you 'Thriller'/
Moonwalk around town like I'm Mike Jack, little man pussied out, now he gone fight back/
Man, i'm on another planet, call me Janet Jackson cause I popped nipples outta cannons, matter fact call me Nick cause my Cannon be my dick/
I'll ride slow this time, get focused on my rhymes, textbook schedules tell me I got Math next, maybe its the key to my next check/

[Ice_Scarred]

Any feed? A lot of people viewed it...come on guys don't be like that. If its bad just tell me, or whatever you thought about it.

[JPearson]

if you dropped the audio then we'd know how it flowed n would be much easier to feed... sounds complex which is good, but hard to tell reading it

[Ice_Scarred]

if you dropped the audio then we'd know how it flowed n would be much easier to feed... sounds complex which is good, but hard to tell reading it

Thanks for the feed.

[ritchieA]

yh this would be way beta wid audio but it reads good aswell

[Ice_Scarred]

yh this would be way beta wid audio but it reads good aswell

Thanks man! I appreciate it. Moar Feed, plz....

[JPearson]

u gunna spit it audio? coz it looks like it would be sick to listen to

[Ice_Scarred]

u gunna spit it audio? coz it looks like it would be sick to listen to

Thanks, when I get my mic back it may be the first thing I record. Just to test out my flow and my lyrics. I still need a lot of work done on them. Thanks Scott!

[JPearson]

u got any other lyrics? if u ave i'll check em out

[Ice_Scarred]

u got any other lyrics? if u ave i'll check em out

Yeah, I got some older material I posted on here. I got some stuff in my Rhymebook 2. Thanks for the support bro!

[D'Leh]

very nice work.....i couldnt catch up the flow completly but good rhymes!!

[Ice_Scarred]

very nice work.....i couldnt catch up the flow completly but good rhymes!!

Thanks homie. Thanks for the support!

[Ice_Scarred]

Man, i'm on another planet, call me Janet Jackson cause I popped nipples outta cannons, matter fact call me Nick cause my Cannon be my dick/
I'll ride slow this time, get focused on my rhymes, textbook schedules tell me I got Math next, maybe its the key to my next check/

thats just dope

the flow is just crazy weird, but I enjoy that. Can really hear/read the drake influence.

A few parts seemed a bit hardcore, but that can be excused since you were being random.

Sorry if it ain't that good

shut the fuck up, it's great!

Good stuff man, can't wait to see you write again. I don't know what I wanna see more, you with a subject or just crazy random again.

Oh wow dude, THANKS! I appreciate the feedback homie. I need inspiration before I write, so I gotta find it *smokes some grass*. Thanks man!

[gutawafang]

That was good. Even though the structure's hard to understand, I could flow to it but without a beat in my head. LOL. Honestly, your nameplay is DAMN DAMN DAMN good.

[Ice_Scarred]

That was good. Even though the structure's hard to understand, I could flow to it but without a beat in my head. LOL. Honestly, your nameplay is DAMN DAMN DAMN good.

Thanks a lot bro! I gotta keep working at this stuff. I really appreciate the feedback. I have to keep feeding others work as well. I will work on that.