Wait And See(Single...FINISHED)

[Spyder]

ight thanks man, but yeah i was probably looking for sumin a little bit cheaper lol

[MC Anonymous]

this is the final version i am putting on my new album.

Its like every time I have a thought to jot, I let it out
Represent the best in this mess, shits expected now.
Don’t you get it clown, I would never wanna let him down
Forget the crown, tryin to hold onto this life im livin now.
It happened in an instant wow, workin my way to the top
Stayin up late so these kids can play the tape when it drops.
Whether it breaks or it rocks, shit makes it or flops
I can always fix my game cuz im only great in some spots.
I’ve been-dope since I stared tokin that endo smoke
started battlin the second that my pen-cil broke
started smashin bros. for real when my nintendo croaked
but puffin made me choke as soon as it entered my throat.
Am I even visible, rappin with the king of the kings
watchin comrades tryin to get the swing of this thing.
We in the ring when I sting, a modern day A-li
but all im hearin is people sayin how great I’ll be
just two faced bitches whose wishes is to play wit me
ima laugh when I make it, just you wait and see.

started smashin bros. for real when my nintendo croaked

This was was good, I think you could have done better flow wise and technical-wise but for what it is it's pretty good bro. I felt you needed more internals to keep the flow more seamless but that will come in time.

Hook(X2)
Have you ever been told youll make it one day
but ask em why you hot and they got nothin to say
but all these faggots wanna keep touch in some way
so when you get dough they can have a cut in the pay.

Chorus is bad.

On the streets at three, bustin my butt hustlin
Rustlin up the cut to start my own production
But for what… leading me to self-destruction
quit fussin and shut up, bustin this gun is nothin.
There have been many tears shed, many appear dead
many on the right path, but I have seemed to have veered left.
But right now the mics all I got, like it or not
I gotta listen to people despite what I thought.
Always gonna go for the goal I wanna achieve
keep the fire alive like there is a sauna in me
and continue tellin myself they just wanna be me
and keep looking at this rap shit positively.
Hopefully I can influence the new kids to do shit
make adults feel stupid when pranks aint even congruent.
To the shit I use to pull, always runnin from the cops
gunnin from the SWAT, duckin from the shots.
Bustin up the blocks, now the streets have vacancy
Im in the studio, ima be great, just wait and see.

Average for your standards, beginning was hot, middle was borderline hot to average and last part was average.

Hook(X2)
Have you ever been told youll make it one day
but ask em why you hot and they got nothin to say
but all these faggots wanna keep touch in some way
so when you get dough they can have a cut in the pay.

Workin and fightin, time can be better spent
all frowns found while I remain benevolent.
I represent the present with livin in the moment
I own it, never let it go and control it.
So when its my time at the mic I can shine
In case someone gets bored with their life
And decides to come after mine… hopeless
standin frozen, I’m my own worst opponent.
But ill never know it, now where am I bound
cuz when you at the top you can only go down.
Am I gonna keep this mind frame, damn right
Im like a ghost in the night fillin you solely with fright
not only tonight, but slowly for the rest of your life.
Now that ive gotten into this rap game its past me
no longer a bum or a thug, but that’s exactly
what we need on the streets to remind us
of the shit we went through, and put behind us.
Now as the kids move on with lives lazily
One day they’ll all make, man just wait and see.

To be honest I didn't finish this verse, it's boring to read. I think the audio will sound better though.

Hook(X2)
Have you ever been told youll make it one day
but ask em why you hot and they got nothin to say
but all these faggots wanna keep touch in some way
so when you get dough they can have a cut in the pay.


No matter what they say or do to you, just keep your head up
Cuz there is always somthin better ahead of you. The grass is always greener
You just gotta find it… and once you get it, never let it go.

Over all it's 7/10... you can do better then this.

[Spyder]

ight man, thanks for the feed