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Re: 60 Bars and Change

Postby Spyder » Aug 7th, '09, 02:23

ill man really, i flowed to it nice and though it was better than alot of stuff i have seen from u.
great vocab and multies in there. good job bro
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Re: 60 Bars and Change

Postby JMG » Aug 7th, '09, 02:28

that was dope man keep it up
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Re: 60 Bars and Change

Postby D'Leh » Aug 7th, '09, 02:47

i loved the flow, nice timing, rhyming, and a good ass verse!!! :y:
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Re: 60 Bars and Change

Postby classthe_king » Aug 7th, '09, 03:18

wow dope :worship: the punchlines were great and you kept it up the entire time. Some great lines that made me lol were:

i rip then take breaths, you rip then take losses
Michael Scott MC's, you guys are fake bosses

hittin back at fake thugs talkin "i write man stuff"
packin handguns up in their twilight fanclubs

from warm to roastin, while ya bitches sorta failin
sayn ya pack toastas like a door ta door salesmen

overall great and funny verse :y: :worship:
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Re: 60 Bars and Change

Postby D'Leh » Aug 7th, '09, 03:27

zurditoshady wrote:i loved the flow, nice timing, rhyming, and a good ass verse!!! :y:



also the structure its great....you're a talented man!!! keep it coming! :y:
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Re: 60 Bars and Change

Postby Solace » Aug 7th, '09, 03:52

Holy fuck man. When we collab, I'm scared you're gunna make the reader completely forget about my verse. Shit that was great and it didn't get boring as it went on. Lately most people here are dropping that ill shit a person wants to read.
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Re: 60 Bars and Change

Postby Solace » Aug 7th, '09, 03:56

Coleon wrote:your last shit you've dropped people have adored, including me

Aw come on man thats nasty :zipped:
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Re: 60 Bars and Change

Postby JMG » Aug 7th, '09, 04:01

get a room lol jp
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Re: 60 Bars and Change

Postby Solace » Aug 7th, '09, 04:07

cole-mance

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Re: 60 Bars and Change

Postby Solace » Aug 7th, '09, 04:16

Haha
whatever we're writers this shit is a dope mance a flow mance a...rock and roll mance

if there really was something going on then...


Blow-Mance :whistle:

edit: oh and now i just quickly re-read it and lol'd at

braud is wetter, she thankin me like Drama Setter

I didnt really get it at first but...

lol good job coleon thx!
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Re: 60 Bars and Change

Postby Noeezy » Aug 7th, '09, 08:44

Coleon wrote:ya writin future is kinda bleak, i surmised atleast
ya pathetic like blind people at hide and seek


haha
got off to a good start
and stayed consistent through out till the end
nice shit man :y:

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