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NEW STEVE SPAG - Untitled

Postby Steve Spag » Aug 7th, '09, 01:24

Just wrote this verse today. It's to Shadowville's "I Don't Want It Anymore" if anyone wants to bother checkin' out the beat. Not much else to say, except be sure to check out "The Life Overdose" towards the end of the month! I guarantee you will love it! As always, let me know what you think. Any/all feedback is ALWAYS appreciated.

ladies and gentlemen, steve spag's back
with a big spliff, so everybody stay back
i'ma change rap, with these great tracks
somebody save me, 'fore i get payback
ask k. spratt, 'cause he knows what i'm thinkin'
and when it comes women, sometimes i get soo livid
i wanna choke a bitch but i don't wanna go to prison
that's why i wrote soo many, soo many horrid disses
a couple whore's i'm missin', they still affect my brain and
it's always rainy, but baby i am gonna change it
it's like a major train-wreck, and not one single person
was left unharmed, and like this verse it's only gonna worsen
and you can tell i'm nuts by, the way i'm always cursin'
the purpose of this music, to cure me from the hurtin'
somebody draw the curtains, it's not a pretty sight when
my demon's speaks to me 'cause they only like the violence

Copywright: Steve Spag 2009

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Re: NEW STEVE SPAG - Untitled

Postby Solace » Aug 7th, '09, 01:33

That was real dope, started off pretty simple but ended strong. Good multies and I felt that flow :y:

Keep it up, you already know I'm going to check out the Life Overdose.

And if you dont mind dropping feed on my piece Rip At A Young Age? I know it's already gotten a lot of replies but since you've been one of the people that encouraged me from the start I'd like to see what you think of my improvement. If you can, thanks :y:
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Re: NEW STEVE SPAG - Untitled

Postby Steve Spag » Aug 7th, '09, 01:39

^^
Thanks a lot bro, glad you like it!
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Re: NEW STEVE SPAG - Untitled

Postby MC Anonymous » Aug 7th, '09, 01:54

Steve Spag wrote:Just wrote this verse today. It's to Shadowville's "I Don't Want It Anymore" if anyone wants to bother checkin' out the beat. Not much else to say, except be sure to check out "The Life Overdose" towards the end of the month! I guarantee you will love it! As always, let me know what you think. Any/all feedback is ALWAYS appreciated.

ladies and gentlemen, steve spag's back
with a big spliff, so everybody stay back
i'ma change rap, with these great tracks
somebody save me, 'fore i get payback
ask k. spratt, 'cause he knows what i'm thinkin'
and when it comes women, sometimes i get soo livid
i wanna choke a bitch but i don't wanna go to prison
that's why i wrote soo many, soo many horrid disses
a couple whore's i'm missin', they still affect my brain and
it's always rainy, but baby i am gonna change it
it's like a major train-wreck, and not one single person
was left unharmed, and like this verse it's only gonna worsen
and you can tell i'm nuts by, the way i'm always cursin'
the purpose of this music, to cure me from the hurtin'
somebody draw the curtains, it's not a pretty sight when
my demon's speaks to me 'cause they only like the violence

Copywright: Steve Spag 2009

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Hmm.. Idk was a bit weak for your standards. However it's catchy and has a rhyme scheme that will stay in listeners heads. Would be good for a single! I didn't like it much tbh though. :y:
LMFAO@ Brittney, bitch looking worse than a chupacabra mixed with a broken down coyote. You're disgusting ugly, so ugly in fact, my brain simultaneously exploded while processing how bitterly grotesque you look. I would much rather stick ice picks into the walls of my cranium, then stick my dick into your quagmire of a clitoris. You're what would happen if a sperm whale mated with a Godzilla fish..


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Re: NEW STEVE SPAG - Untitled

Postby Ka0t1c » Aug 7th, '09, 02:25

i agree with anon on this one...
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: NEW STEVE SPAG - Untitled

Postby Arabian Shady » Aug 7th, '09, 12:23

it was well written, went well with the beat man, nice flow to it too :y: , seems like a people's track?
Keep 'em comin B
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Re: NEW STEVE SPAG - Untitled

Postby neversnooze » Aug 7th, '09, 17:54

i enjoyed the read. the flow and multies were fairly well written with your simplicity so i enjoyed this piece.

the only thing i disliked was when you brought up train wreck and demon,you should have gone alittle more into detail with those two subjects.

8/10 :wave:
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Re: NEW STEVE SPAG - Untitled

Postby D'Leh » Aug 7th, '09, 18:35

real nice homie!!!!! im a fan!!!! :worship:
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Re: NEW STEVE SPAG - Untitled

Postby Steve Spag » Aug 7th, '09, 20:18

Thanks for all the feed guys, glad you are liking this piece for the most part! I may end up recording it to show you guys the flow, if I ever finish the song, lol.

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