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8 Bars x 3

Postby Noeezy » Aug 6th, '09, 21:23

So far Im just workin out which verses to use for a song

I'mma just begin the story by simply rhyming in my rap //
Avoiding the glorious assembly line leading to a trap //
Cause most rappers are made, with no lyrics to back them//
Their success starts to fade, impossible to see like a atom//
You wonder where they went, cause they wear out like clothes//
Their career was left for dead and its startin to decompose//
Fighting piece for piece, they try to solve the puzzle//
Keep igniting the beef, but the conflict is the struggle//

I'm just pacin myself as i chase for the top place//
If you cant handle the kings why try to come face the ace //
Its ay disgrace that real rap has been misplaced//
To cut to the chase i realized lyrics are not embraced//
Not gonna mention a name to give their image a frame//
Usin' the formula to make a hit is how they milkin the game//
Need some rubbers for these jocks fuckin hiphop in the ass//
Their bubblegum raps are the good for nothin racoons in the trash//

Get caught up in a mess nah i leave ya ass stranded
If i had to fight you lyrically i could do it singlehanded
We take you out the game and replace you like a battery
One bar out yo mouth is already wastin raps capacity
You cant compete with the elite man sit back in ya seat
We bring the heat to the street you can check the receipt
So tell me whose flow comes harder than cali4's can
Either you know nothin or u know that we're the best clan

let me know which verse you enjoyed most :)
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Re: Quick 8

Postby Fa-Q » Aug 6th, '09, 21:25

That was a quick 8 but nice...keep it up man...
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Re: Quick 8

Postby Noeezy » Aug 6th, '09, 21:28

Fa-Q wrote:That was a quick 8 but nice...keep it up man...


thanks for feed, I added some other verses if you want to check em out
lmao at the lemonade line in ur sig.. i like it
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Re: 8 Bars x 3

Postby classthe_king » Aug 7th, '09, 00:51

I thought the first verse was kinda weak, although the last two lines were the best lines in the whole thing imo. The second one was the best just because its flow was the best, it has the best rhyming and i liked the subject matter. The third was inbetween the first and the second and had the best punchlines.
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Re: 8 Bars x 3

Postby Noeezy » Aug 7th, '09, 01:22

classthe_king wrote:I thought the first verse was kinda weak, although the last two lines were the best lines in the whole thing imo. The second one was the best just because its flow was the best, it has the best rhyming and i liked the subject matter. The third was inbetween the first and the second and had the best punchlines.


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yeah i tried recording the 2nd n 3rd verse along with another one, i just gotta work some stuff out so the clarity and shit sounds better, but if you wanna hear it let me know
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Re: 8 Bars x 3

Postby classthe_king » Aug 7th, '09, 01:23

alright thats sweet, pm me it when your done :y:
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Re: 8 Bars x 3

Postby Noeezy » Aug 8th, '09, 09:47

Coleon wrote:so the3 first 1 is really set in stone with the scheme but it's bland, the second one improves the entertainment, but the 3rd is the best imo

you have good mechanics which always helps :y: good drop man :y:


appreciate the feed bro
what happened with the first verse was i was tryna rap it to 'b.o.b. - generation lost' so I was tryna flow to that, but im glad the best ones are the time i spent more time on :happy:
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