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Some lines from an upcoming song

Postby Xray » Aug 11th, '09, 15:50

I go bee's when I fear, and put stings in ya ear//
if I die, I don't care, I take no shit//
Reaper come testin', fuck a confession//
sheikh quit preachin', this homie ain't givin' in//
Livin' thin, no room for reschedulin'//
Fuck a diary, my flow diarrhea, cause this life I be shittin' in//
flush your rhyme scheme//
a bullet in your growth, now that's hygiene//
might seem, I been, a little bit of touching//
hating, this waiting, cause shit is frustrating//

I haven't dropped a song in months so I'm in the progress of writing one. Need to know some inputs on how its going. *Note: Sort of in a writers block...and Sheikh means an elder in Arabic, like a Priest*

Feedback appreciated. :b:
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Re: Some lines from an upcoming song

Postby Robbie G » Aug 11th, '09, 15:52

Lyrically it was pretty dope but I struggled hard trying to rap it so I'm interested in how it flows for you. :p
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Re: Some lines from an upcoming song

Postby BILI » Aug 11th, '09, 15:54

Everything was good rhymes,lyrically dope too...good piece...maybe only structure is off..but its not doing any "damage" to it ....so good drop :y: :y:
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Re: Some lines from an upcoming song

Postby Xray » Aug 11th, '09, 16:00

Thanks for the feed guys. :worship:

Here listen to the beat I'm using for this, might help you flow it lol.

http://www.zshare.net/audio/63967258d41a1321/
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Re: Some lines from an upcoming song

Postby Arabian Shady » Aug 11th, '09, 16:16

sick shit, loved the punches and word plays, flow was non-stop , gangsta nukka :y: :smoking:
sick shit homes, glad to see you writin AND POSTIN IT! ya selfish bastard!
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Re: Some lines from an upcoming song

Postby gutawafang » Aug 11th, '09, 16:21

Does fit in to the beat man. At first I thought it didn't flow but yeah, it does man. This is a snippet or something? It's pretty tight man. I'll be waiting for the whole thing homie. :y:
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Re: Some lines from an upcoming song

Postby Xray » Aug 11th, '09, 16:27

gutawafang wrote:Does fit in to the beat man. At first I thought it didn't flow but yeah, it does man. This is a snippet or something? It's pretty tight man. I'll be waiting for the whole thing homie. :y:
Yeah kind of, also just needed some input on it. But thanks bro appreciate the feed. :worship:

Arabian Shady wrote:sick shit, loved the punches and word plays, flow was non-stop , gangsta nukka :y: :smoking:
sick shit homes, glad to see you writin AND POSTIN IT! ya selfish bastard!
Peace :b:

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Re: Some lines from an upcoming song

Postby mcZu » Aug 11th, '09, 17:24

Seems promising; it's good for what it's worth, flow a bit hard to catch. But I have faith in your rythmic judgement. Keep it up.
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Re: Some lines from an upcoming song

Postby Solace » Aug 11th, '09, 19:55

I could figure the flow, and ya accent makes everything rhyme like crazy so it's all good haha. It was okay, nothing really impressed me to be honest it was just...Ehh. I just have to wait on the song now.
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Re: Some lines from an upcoming song

Postby classthe_king » Aug 11th, '09, 20:59

Im not familiar with any of your other work, but this was just good, nothing special. The only good line was the Hygiene one.
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Re: Some lines from an upcoming song

Postby Xray » Aug 11th, '09, 21:09

Thanks for the feed guys...and yeah you can't really appreciate the lyrics till you've heard them in audio lol, cause I'ma have a pissed off as fuck delivery going on so, look out for the audio.
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Re: Some lines from an upcoming song

Postby classthe_king » Aug 11th, '09, 21:13

Xray wrote:Thanks for the feed guys...and yeah you can't really appreciate the lyrics till you've heard them in audio lol, cause I'ma have a pissed off as fuck delivery going on so, look out for the audio.


haha, yeah thats how it is sometimes. I'll definitely check it out.
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Re: Some lines from an upcoming song

Postby Xray » Aug 11th, '09, 21:20

Thanks fam. :b:
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