Vigilante II

by **mcZu** » Aug 9th, '09, 19:13

I flow like an infinite cascade never seen before/
So evacuate the dance floor -before I go Sophie Ellis-Bextor/
And before I knock you down like Keri, West and Neo/
Without the matrix I burry so-called-best with ease, yo… so/
A breeze flow eliminates seven armies/
If I get mad, your body will get signed by thunder like Kevin Ollie/
The hunger in me is something I can’t control, sorry/
So I turn in to a beast like cheetor, charge forth and scream it’s war/
You can’t escape, I’m wining by far/
Only way you’ll JR Smith my bars, is if you Lucy Gordon yourself with a scarf/
You’ll see; that it’s like an old Mormon, unmarried/
If you think you can beat moi head on in a challenge/
It’s all balance, I’m on top while I’m still underground/
Yes, I may be an oxymoron now, but your just a plain moron, drowned/
Me? A general moving the king, don’t need to be crowned/
Now… how does that sound?/

by **D'Leh** » Aug 9th, '09, 19:17

really nice flow, rhymes and structure man! you're awesome at this!
maybe if you check my song, its called Fat Fuck - finished version.. you can give me some tips and stuff likt that ...thanks!!!!! :y:

by **classthe_king** » Aug 9th, '09, 20:00

^ I have a tip for you, make a song about something other then fucking a fat girl.

I thought the song was great, i expeccially liked these two lines

It’s all balance, I’m on top while I’m still underground/
Yes, I may be an oxymoron now, but your just a plain moron, drowned/

by **mcZu** » Aug 9th, '09, 20:09

Thanks Zurditoshady and Classthe_king :b:

by **D'Leh** » Aug 9th, '09, 20:11

classthe_king wrote:^ I have a tip for you, make a song about something other then fucking a fat girl.

I thought the song was great, i expeccially liked these two lines

It’s all balance, I’m on top while I’m still underground/
Yes, I may be an oxymoron now, but your just a plain moron, drowned/

look man its only onw song so dont hate

by **mcZu** » Aug 10th, '09, 12:38

^Please disscus this somewhere else. I would like to leave this thread clean :flower:

by **mcZu** » Aug 11th, '09, 17:25

Bump.

by **mcZu** » Aug 11th, '09, 17:49

krayzy wrote:lyrically great, and i really like your style, pretty unique, the flow was good, the rhymes were pretty top notch, sick drop overall
keep it up man

Thanks fam. :b:

by **mcZu** » Aug 12th, '09, 22:09

Coleon wrote:i couldn't keep up with the referneces because i didn't know the people but sounded clever decent flow, good lyrics, and if i was more understanding i'm sure i'd like it more but still dope

you're growing as an artist consistently

Thanks for the feed, bro :y: