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goin to a foreign land

Postby Ka0t1c » Aug 13th, '09, 18:52

i'm goin to a foreign land where there is war at hand
and i know that you're no fan
but i swear one day you'll understand
why i steered this way towards Afghanistan
it's because here they say, i am more than man
so i'd like to share my story plans
then before next year, i'm coming back with a normal tan
and i swear, i'll have my camera packed to record, my fam
plus i'll stay wearin my camelbak on my uniform, i can
be aware, i won't show no slack
i'm prepared for doing grown up acts, that is clear
cuz a soldier's task is a born nightmare
though i will not let it scare
me from the most important fact
i must bare with all sorts of stress to carry
forward, what a test, and it varies
but to my best, i'll explore thru the mess and horror
i guess, the Talibans form disorder and this is my torture
yes, i was warned of the mortars
and until the borders rest, civillian reporters will nest
and tell about our quarters for the press in their corner
cuz it's a point of interest and also Iraq's
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: goin to a foreign land

Postby Emadyville » Aug 13th, '09, 20:53

interesting and different I liked it especially the first third of it :y:
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Re: goin to a foreign land

Postby Ka0t1c » Aug 13th, '09, 22:14

thanx guys, i'm glad you both understood the pattern to this :y:
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: goin to a foreign land

Postby classthe_king » Aug 13th, '09, 23:47

I thought it was good, interesting topic.
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Re: goin to a foreign land

Postby Ka0t1c » Aug 14th, '09, 03:13

thanx for checkin it out :)
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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