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Murderer

Postby BILI » Aug 11th, '09, 22:17

You won`t smile much, commin running with this knife,shut down the light
Pop outta darkness to stab ya wife, take away her life
Matter of fact take away her soul,motherfucker lets see now who`ll mourn
filled with scorn,while I sit and watch porn, ejaculate in the pop corn
Her whole head blows, explodes, brain?, Only one vein is that holds-
It,Ima pop your head too,consider yourself dead bitch, not some threat shit
You should bet quick, I`ll run you over with my corvette,
body against the cement fixed, poke your eye with cigarette lit
Ima kill your whole family,don"t give a damn ya see, gainin cred quick

This is something new..Coleon helped me with some rhymes on it ;)
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Re: Murderer

Postby classthe_king » Aug 11th, '09, 22:20

Haha on the last four lines? lol. Im not really into the verses about killing people and doing crazy things like ejaculating into pop corn? But good to see some multi's.
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Re: Murderer

Postby BILI » Aug 11th, '09, 22:41

Thx guy but its probably cause Coleon helped me a bit with this one
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Re: Murderer

Postby BILI » Aug 12th, '09, 02:14

bump
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Re: Murderer

Postby gutawafang » Aug 12th, '09, 04:37

LOL BILI! You really love those bumpy rides don't ya? HAHA.

Well Bili, this Murder piece ain't full of multis. It flowed not that good, especially at the start. But the wordplay in this is pretty good. Keep writing man.
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Re: Murderer

Postby BILI » Aug 12th, '09, 15:10

gutawafang wrote:LOL BILI! You really love those bumpy rides don't ya? HAHA.

Well Bili, this Murder piece ain't full of multis. It flowed not that good, especially at the start. But the wordplay in this is pretty good. Keep writing man.

thx man
But what do you mean by bumpy rides? :whistle:
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Re: Murderer

Postby gutawafang » Aug 12th, '09, 15:46

I meant "bump". You like doing that. :p
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Re: Murderer

Postby BILI » Aug 12th, '09, 15:52

gutawafang wrote:I meant "bump". You like doing that. :p

Oh yeah.....lol :D
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Re: Murderer

Postby emzee-frenzy » Aug 14th, '09, 07:14

i actually like this crazy shit about killing people, i mean you know that BILLI cause you saw some shit, and i do like reading it, for me i consume my shit inside in it way better then the emotional shit , i wanna see more bro :flower:
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