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Re: Shining

Postby Solace » Aug 29th, '09, 03:18

Its a good piece man, the chorus was very well done and choruses are hard as fuck to pull off in my opinion cause they gotta be short but dope (like telling a 2 hour story in 1 minute to say). Very deep man, usually people would try to pull off a whole verse with just some good couplets but everything had a good "make you think" kind of look on it. Didnt get why 2nd verse was shorter than others tho.

So when I feel life’s gotten too hard I just got to run like Sonic

that was corny tho lmfao

keep it up man cant wait for our collab...word solace scotty zu collab soon madafuckers...
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Re: Shining

Postby Slim Zaddy » Aug 29th, '09, 11:29

that's sick homie ,, i liked all ,, the chorus is dope .. verse 1 and verse 3 are sick ,, lyrically it was good ,, i liked your rhymes , and the emotion you have in the piece , beside that it flowed well .. keep it up scooty :y:
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