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Target practice

Postby emzee-frenzy » Aug 30th, '09, 10:10

invert verses till the point they distort nervous sistems
of nurse asistents when i burst this sentence victims
pass out of existance, Bitches came in time to wittness
clever criminal tactics like face masks made of melted plastics
kidnappin a starlet actress and using her for target practice
the darkest, when i battle my skin hardens, yours is soft like
Baby Johnson's, fucking non-sense facing a whack Mc with no punches
little female i'll have you impaled and keep you locked up like teen jail
till the world looses your trail, starving you but not enough for you to die
so i can hear your scream and cry for a couple more of them french fries
hey guys, let's play "lies wifes and knives" see wich one of these sluts
won't have her chance to play twice, i slay and slice, she can pray to Christ
get sent to him at the speed of light when i ignite this stick of dynamite.
"misoginistic mysteries missunderstood by missing mistresses,
throat slitting bitches in public then start killing witnesses" - emzee
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Re: Target practice

Postby Slim Zaddy » Aug 30th, '09, 11:47

dope drop man , i liked it .. flow is sickk , .. i did'nt like the content but other than that it's good ... you had some good lines out ther e :y:
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Re: Target practice

Postby emzee-frenzy » Aug 30th, '09, 12:05

thank's man :flower: , you mean like the content was whack or it was not your genre? :unsure:
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Re: Target practice

Postby Slim Zaddy » Aug 30th, '09, 12:10

emzee-frenzy wrote:thank's man :flower: , you mean like the content was whack or it was not your genre? :unsure:


nah not whack bro ,, it's just yeah was'nt my genre ,, not my type .. that's all .. but good job :b: :b: :y:
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Re: Target practice

Postby emzee-frenzy » Aug 30th, '09, 12:15

thx bro :happy:
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Re: Target practice

Postby Slim Zaddy » Aug 30th, '09, 13:04

emzee-frenzy wrote:thx bro :happy:


anytime man :flower:
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Re: Target practice

Postby gutawafang » Aug 30th, '09, 13:49

As usual, good vocab. Flow was okay.
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Re: Target practice

Postby emzee-frenzy » Aug 30th, '09, 14:01

thanks guta :flower:
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Re: Target practice

Postby Drama Setter » Aug 30th, '09, 18:28

good verse bro ,

hey guys, let's play "lies wifes and knives" see wich one of these sluts
won't have her chance to play twice, i slay and slice, she can pray to Christ
get sent to him at the speed of light when i ignite this stick of dynamite.


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Re: Target practice

Postby classthe_king » Aug 30th, '09, 18:52

Yeah, good vocab, but it was kinda jumpy. Not as good as some of your other verses, but not bad. Keep practicing. :y:
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Re: Target practice

Postby emzee-frenzy » Aug 30th, '09, 18:53

classthe_king wrote:Yeah, good vocab, but it was kinda jumpy. Not as good as some of your other verses, but not bad. Keep practicing. :y:

well yeah it was fun writing it, not really worked on it , it relaxes me a lot :flower:
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