Stepped through the door

[King Bullet]

Just spittin' off the top of my head...bored...check it out:

Sick of them motherfuckin' sweet talks,bitch here comes the dirt!
Killin' them soft rappers,motherfucker I bomb you first!
Leakin' outta their vaginas,I'm bout to wash your squirt.
Squash you hurt,soon as I stepped through the door,you lost your worth.
Ain't no peace talks with you pussies cause the boss don't flirt.
Show you no mercy,ice cold MC,I'm frost since birth...
Come to me,two choices,either you get lost or murked.
Comin' through the hallway,
you don't run,not that you wouldn't,you would,but no way.
Cut off your motherfuckin' balls,but it's nothin',I just threw the foreplay.
Want me to ease your pain,of course,hey!
I stabbed you with the knife and a fork,so let the fork stay.
Just don't pull it or move your eyes and you'll be okay...

Throw me some feedback...I appreciate it...

[mcZu]

Needs definitly some work here and there, but it's not bad. Next time try some multies, different rhyme schemes, wordplay and metaphors.

Keep on writing.

[D'Leh]

great work,you can use some multies and shit like that...Keep It Coming!!!

[King Bullet]

Thnx guys. I'm tryin' to make a comeback...I didn't write for about 2 months.So I'm slowly startin' again.Step by step.Expect somethin' better soon.

[Slim Zaddy]

you got the potential homie ,, but it's just you have to be satisfied about it yourself before posting it here ,, but it's a good try .. practice make perfects . try to do what my other's homies told ya .. i will be watching ya next drop .. keep it up

[King Bullet]

you got the potential homie ,, but it's just you have to be satisfied about it yourself before posting it here ,, but it's a good try .. practice make perfects . try to do what my other's homies told ya .. i will be watching ya next drop .. keep it up

Thnx for the support homie,appreciate it.