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Lyrical Murderer

Postby mcZu » Aug 30th, '09, 22:39

Why not, lyrically murder these noobs w/ a side shot
‘bout to turn them cold, call ‘em Noob Saibot
It’s quite, not quiet, but a strike knot, see
Aint talking ‘bout Inglorious basterds victims
Rather ask for a placement w/ a corny basilisk bashing quake like Richter
Than battling me, ‘cause I’ll break like 26 bones and 33 joints on a pedal
Lyrically I’m beyond a gold medal
Fuck you up like you was Meadow on a classic piano
I’m fierce and deadly like the R of the Soprano’s
I’m a physical manifestation of a lyrical biblical miracle saturation
I’m flyer than ya’ll, call me a faster Nathan
Stop talking ‘bout beating me like masturbation
They dying to beef, I tell ‘em meet w/ the butcher on a cemetery, yo
Leave you w/ double vision like that split screen in Kutcher’s seventy show
This is how a lyrical assassin rolls
Armed w/ sinful, tactical, animal like tact that strikes like Cole McGrath
Leave enemies in a Kevin Ollie state
‘cause I sign my victims w/ thunder, no wonder I still amaze
I’m a beast, hungry for days ‘cause
Ya‘ll know I trill people like Bun B’s LP does

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Re: Lyrical Murderer

Postby Fa-Q » Aug 30th, '09, 22:45

lol that masterbation line was dope....interesting concept....maybe make a song with straight punchlines no hook or nothing
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Re: Lyrical Murderer

Postby mcZu » Aug 30th, '09, 22:56

Thanks Fa-Q. :y:

And I've done that in the past. Maybe I'll turn this one into one as well.
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Re: Lyrical Murderer

Postby mcZu » Aug 30th, '09, 23:06

^Thanks Cole, yeah, I wrote it to the same beat. :shifty:
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Re: Lyrical Murderer

Postby D'Leh » Sep 2nd, '09, 17:53

awesome dude :y:
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Re: Lyrical Murderer

Postby Slim Zaddy » Sep 2nd, '09, 17:55

damn,, sick verse man,, dope multies ,, and lyrics are just great,, keep them comming homie :worship:
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Re: Lyrical Murderer

Postby Relapse.LP » Sep 2nd, '09, 19:21

Awesome concept, but I think the rhyming scheme could be more complex with more internals and better multies.

LMAO at Coleon's signature. You ready to battle me yet? I beat MC Anon, homie 5-2.
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Lyrical Murderer

Postby mcZu » Sep 2nd, '09, 22:56

zurditoshady wrote:awesome dude :y:


Thanks Zurdo, appreciate it :b:

Slim Zaddy wrote:damn,, sick verse man,, dope multies ,, and lyrics are just great,, keep them comming homie :worship:


Thanks Zaddy, I will. :b:

da.relapse.lp wrote:Awesome concept, but I think the rhyming scheme could be more complex with more internals and better multies.


Thanks Da.relapse.lp, and yeah, I know what you mean. However, the beat I wrote to asked for this. It would fuck up the flow if it would have too much multies and internals.
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Re: Lyrical Murderer

Postby classthe_king » Sep 2nd, '09, 23:39

Dope shit :worship: , what beat did you use for this, just curious.
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Re: Lyrical Murderer

Postby mcZu » Sep 2nd, '09, 23:42

classthe_king wrote:Dope shit :worship: , what beat did you use for this, just curious.


Thanks Class.

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Re: Lyrical Murderer

Postby classthe_king » Sep 2nd, '09, 23:43

mcZu wrote:
classthe_king wrote:Dope shit :worship: , what beat did you use for this, just curious.


Thanks Class.

Slaughterhouse - Lyrical Murderers


Lmao! Should have guessed that. Just wanted to see how you flowed to the beat so I could improve my flow ;)
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Re: Lyrical Murderer

Postby mcZu » Sep 2nd, '09, 23:44

^Hahaha, a'ight.
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Re: Lyrical Murderer

Postby gutawafang » Sep 3rd, '09, 03:04

I can't catch the flow. Prolly because of structure.

But the punchlines there are pretty good man.

This is good:
Than battling me, ‘cause I’ll break like 26 bones and 33 joints on a pedal

Love the title. :flower:
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Re: Lyrical Murderer

Postby mcZu » Sep 3rd, '09, 17:29

^Thanks Guta :b:
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