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Some Reject Lines

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Some Reject Lines

Postby J Roc » Sep 4th, '09, 01:44

J's Our Captain, I Come From Where You Could Never Take our Jackets
Think I-Bluff Watch My-Guns "Light-Up" like Fake Car Crashes
If i Blow-Toatz You'll "Go-Ghost" Like James R Status
I Come From The Hood, You Could get Bodied For Giving Me The Ugliest Looks
You Could Go missing Like You Drunk In The Woods
You Ain't Ill-Dawg If Your "Skill-Saw" You Was Cutting Some Wood
i'll Blow ya Chest Off, Ya-Man's-Back is Like Japans-Flag it'lll See a 'Red Dot'
You Dont Wanna Test Roc J's-Lead Make u Always "Play-Dead" Like a Pet Rock

Lightwork .. just soem Lines that didn't make the Cut .... :staticsmoking:
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Re: Some Reject Lines

Postby Fa-Q » Sep 4th, '09, 08:29

All of them looked like they had a good line in there just if you reworded the...like that japanese flag.
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Re: Some Reject Lines

Postby mcZu » Sep 4th, '09, 21:31

Red dot/Japanese flag punch is played out. Other lines were kinda 'meh.'

You can do way better, but I guess that's why you rejected them.
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