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long ass freestyle

Postby D'Leh » Sep 9th, '09, 03:24

Fuckin D’Leh started slow,but his raps were fucked like whores
everyone seen him as lite chores, skills parallel to a V 4
your backwards nigga but we cant say ridas rough
we all know hes not ford cause your not built tuff
outta luck times up ,truth is your flow sucks
a lot like your girl,EVERYTIME i see her she goes NUTS
hes got no heart cheap tin,how can i make him understand
he was searching for the wizard but found a iron man
he got no heart no courage and hes always LION(lying) dam
i nail foes and I SCARE CROWS,with a pen in my hand

SO NO more games,his brain my raps will drain
roughrida was slain so many times he changed his name
he a ghost now real talk i aint playin,go read our first battle youll see what im saying
you signed bitch how u need more then preying,and let me get the number to the person whos paying
i know people are hungry get needy,greedy on that paper chase
he cant keep up he wants muscle but he just keeps losing weight
how can you do shows your a wack disgrace dam fam portlands supporting some bad taste
and he got in with the astros (how lol) there lineup was great
but whyd you guys have to add this fake,you guys are astronauts you should have said you have no space
on mybars im sex offender ridas getting rapped
he knew he was gonna lose so he wanted to be taped
it wouldn matter if you were repping PORTLAND,CALI,or SEATlLE
cause your name says it ALL ghost dont ever win rap battles
i go in deep when i spit like his chick i thrust her
i call her roughridas bitch so when i hit she calls me the ghost buster
so ketchup nigga your getting smothered in this mustard
you couldn shine in your rhymes even if they were buffered

so fuck your spit your shine
your rhymes and your mind
your really not signed,
so ima call him out on his fake grind
he had that up back when he sucked claimed
he did shows all the time
last line i every write for him fuck shooting ill just knife him so hell be never forgetting
like 9/11 always regretting let it be a lesson fuck with ray and youll see Armageddon........



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Re: long ass freestyle

Postby gutawafang » Sep 9th, '09, 04:57

Motherfucking dope flow and many spelling errors. But it's dope man in terms of flow although the structure could improve. Seriously, it's pretty good man. Keep it up. 8/10. :worship:
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Re: long ass freestyle

Postby Slim Zaddy » Sep 9th, '09, 14:18

man content is dope ,, liked it ,, flow was there ,, lyrics and rhymes are great too ,, dope shit for sue ,, just fix da structure and you will be fine ,, good drop homie :y:
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