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The Mask

Postby D'Leh » Sep 9th, '09, 02:21

i been writing a lot lately, so i came up with this freestyle

gas masks got a task, to eat all of you alive,
noone will survive, when our troops arrive,
im obnoxious, and i knock yo ass unconcious,
like party rappers, we eat em for brunches,
i keep so low profile im a subliminal criminal,
im so ahead you still use morse, im digital,
im so sick like neyo, and glover is a she yo,
our rhymes sharp like minus 90 degree yo,
your rhymes are blunt, just like phillies,
and i aint got a single weaknees like achillies,
apparantly i bit some line from remix a millie,
so im fixin this, remixin this, im illy,
and you cant touch me, im too fuckin hot,
smoke some pot, and you shot, with a red dot,
im too good, causin jealous workers on strike,
so turn up the mic, n let me prove the hype

any feed?? :whistle:
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Re: The Mask

Postby DaKidLilj » Sep 9th, '09, 02:40

loved it
Eminem - Infinite

Ayo, my pen and paper cause a chain reaction
To get your brain relaxing, a zany acting maniac in action
A brainiac in fact son, you mainly lack attraction
You look insanely whack when just a fraction of my tracks spun
My rhyming skills got you climbing hills
I travel through your mind into you spine like siren drills
I'm sliming grills of roaches, with sprayed on disinfectants
Twist the necks of rappers 'til their spinal column disconnects
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Re: The Mask

Postby D'Leh » Sep 9th, '09, 02:42

DaKidLilj wrote:loved it



thanks man!!! you have msn?? :y:
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Re: The Mask

Postby King Bullet » Sep 9th, '09, 02:50

Well to be honest,it's not your best.You did lotta better things.It's cool,though you could bit improove rhymes on this one.Peace out.

btw,if you got some time check out my new shit in audio section. :)
At least I know that I don't know...question is: are you bozos smart enough to feel stupid?!-hope so!!!
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Re: The Mask

Postby drasticlyhated » Sep 9th, '09, 02:55

sickest lyrics ive heard in a while the flow was even sicker
the shit i do most doers never done
ima fuck this beat ya bitch
you better come, better run this shit
i dont run from shit, i still b-beay
your ass like a fuckin drum stick
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Re: The Mask

Postby D'Leh » Sep 9th, '09, 02:55

King Bullet wrote:Well to be honest,it's not your best.You did lotta better things.It's cool,though you could bit improove rhymes on this one.Peace out.

btw,if you got some time check out my new shit in audio section. :)



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Re: The Mask

Postby gutawafang » Sep 9th, '09, 04:59

Pretty simple yet fucking cool man.

Most of the lines are common but yeah, nice multis man. :worship:
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Re: The Mask

Postby BILI » Sep 9th, '09, 17:40

Its dope man :worship:
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Re: The Mask

Postby D'Leh » Sep 9th, '09, 17:42

BILI wrote:Its dope man :worship:




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