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I'mma brush u off

Postby J Roc » Sep 8th, '09, 03:03

My 'Covers Hard', Rocs a Book, And None of the Other-Bars u Drop is Good
Charity's Thinks i'd 'Give to the poor' cause i'm always Robbin' Hoods... [?]
Slowly Drop a Rhyme, This Ain't a Race - So You Don't wanna Cross the Line
Cause They treat the Ratchet-Claps like "Grammar-Class" Cause they'll Dot your "Eyes"
Think All Is fine, Until You Get Backstabbed by The "Tommy gunn" Like Rocky 5
I Got doubles Heated, That'll Blow This "Hick-Up" Like Trouble Breathing (Breathe Ez!)
I'll Do Open-Acts Until i get a Golden-"Plaque" Like Gum Diseases
And these Racists-say they "Hate-a-race" but i'll still Run For Reasons
J's Bars Good, All ur lines looks like ur on "Writers Block" Like JR's hood...Whoa
My Bars a Factor, If Ur On My-Dick on the ground i'll give ur "Side Kicks" Like Stars & Actors
I'm on the Main-Page after i perform they get the "Stage-Named" Like Marshall Mathers
i Get Feared, My Rivals-Look Cause their only "Child-hoods" like my Kid Years
You Could Join Em Aswell,
Cause you never came up with anything "New Since". You Was Annoying as Hell
Nuisince...........................................................Light Light
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Re: I'mma brush u off

Postby mcZu » Sep 8th, '09, 20:27

Only liked the tommy line. But not bad... you can do better though.
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Re: I'mma brush u off

Postby Solace » Sep 9th, '09, 01:39

Pretty dope imo, you always putting out punches how the fuck do you do it lol...keep at it
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Re: I'mma brush u off

Postby Xray » Sep 13th, '09, 07:43

Charity's Thinks i'd 'Give to the poor' cause i'm always Robbin' Hoods... [?]

Haha similar line to one of mine:

I'm your arch enemy, archery, like Robin Hood, ain't nobody robbing me.


This can turn into a good verse in audio, flows well. :y:
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Over a billion Muslims, you could never stop Islam
Over a billion bullets shooting from the chopper's arm
Carry a motherfucker head that I shred in Nam
I speak literally, figuratively, the prophet gone


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Re: I'mma brush u off

Postby Relapse.LP » Sep 13th, '09, 08:42

J Roc, you're reign at the top was short like leprechauns, because I crushed all fake-ass rappers, lyricists, and mafia dons. :smoking:

I'm beyond original. :tounge2:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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