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Re: Multi Mechanic

Postby Relapse.LP » Sep 14th, '09, 02:04

:n: You can do better, although that's not saying shit.
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Multi Mechanic

Postby Relapse.LP » Sep 14th, '09, 02:08

Coleon wrote:
da.relapse.lp wrote::n: You can do better, although that's not saying shit.


yeah I poured my heart and soul into these worthless 12 bars


No wonder it was shit.
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Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Multi Mechanic

Postby classthe_king » Sep 14th, '09, 03:47

da.relapse.lp wrote::n: You can do better, although that's not saying shit.


These worthless 12 bars he just wrote are better then your whole classic song.
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Multi Mechanic

Postby gutawafang » Sep 14th, '09, 04:30

Word to Class.

Anyways, Coleon, you had good vocabulary in this. Flow was just okay to me.

I think this is good punchline:
conduse raps, reduce tracks ta nothin but chewed flaps
of food scrap, conjurin greatness, authorin blazes

Awesome man. :)
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Re: Multi Mechanic

Postby Relapse.LP » Sep 14th, '09, 04:32

classthe_king wrote:
da.relapse.lp wrote::n: You can do better, although that's not saying shit.


These worthless 12 bars he just wrote are better then your whole classic song.


My freestyle ain't called Classic, retard, the instrumental I freestyled to is.

Fucktard. classthe_king, who the fuck do you listen to? Besides Slim, boy...
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Multi Mechanic

Postby classthe_king » Sep 14th, '09, 04:56

da.relapse.lp wrote:
classthe_king wrote:
da.relapse.lp wrote::n: You can do better, although that's not saying shit.


These worthless 12 bars he just wrote are better then your whole classic song.


My freestyle ain't called Classic, retard, the instrumental I freestyled to is.

Fucktard. classthe_king, who the fuck do you listen to? Besides Slim, boy...


I have Jay's whole discography, nas's whole discography, all of the bdp albums, all the rakim-eric b combo albums, big daddy kanes early albums, kool g rap's early albums, jedi mind trick's discography, both army of the pharoahs albums, all of biggie's pac's big l's and big pun's albums. All of mobb deeps, a tribe called quest, common, talib kweli and the wu tangs albums. Thats a little bit of my itunes.
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Multi Mechanic

Postby Relapse.LP » Sep 14th, '09, 05:07

You got LL Cool J's Radio? :o
I need that album... :(
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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