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Suicide

Postby macdaddy019967 » Sep 9th, '09, 18:03

Every night as I lay down to sleep,
These thoughts seep into my mind,
Thoughts about overdose,
Thoughts about cutting to deep.

These thoughts are the ones I wake to,
These thoughts are the last ones I have,
As I lay my head down,
These thoughts are the ones that come,
While I sit in school and smile,
These are the thoughts that haunt me.

I want to drown,
Get hit by a car,
Hang from rope,
Bleed till I’m dry,
Drink till it’s dark,
Overdose on pills,
Cry every tear,
Leave this behind.

By fire,
By ice,
I want to end my life,
I don’t care how,
As long as it’s now,
Just end it all.

I know that she’ll cry,
I know that he’ll yell,
I know they’ll hate me,
For what I did,
But still,
Please let me end it.

I drink to feel good,
I cut just to feel,
Why do I try so hard,
When my effort does nothing at all.

I can’t go on,
This shell of a person,
I need to break out,
Get out of this hell.

Suicide haunts me,
Suicidal thoughts,
Suicide is in my mind,
Suicide runs how I walk,
How I talk.

Suicide,
A sad,
Taboo,
Good-bye.

Suicide,
It’s going to make them all cry.

Suicide,
Reserve me a seat in hell,
Suicide,
I’m getting out of this shell.

Suicide,
A sad,
Taboo,
Good-bye.

Good-bye.
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Re: Suicide

Postby gutawafang » Sep 9th, '09, 18:13

Nicey yo. Read all of it. Pretty good man. Just too much commas that's all. :happy:
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Re: Suicide

Postby D'Leh » Sep 9th, '09, 18:16

thats a dope drop hime any feed?? Sexy Chick or the Mask
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Re: Suicide

Postby macdaddy019967 » Sep 9th, '09, 18:18

gutawafang wrote:Nicey yo. Read all of it. Pretty good man. Just too much commas that's all. :happy:

lmao at the commas
ive always sucked at that i have no idea when to use them really i just kinda throw em in there
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Re: Suicide

Postby Relapse.LP » Sep 9th, '09, 23:47

Sounds like Suicidal Thoughts by Biggie but less dope.
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Suicide

Postby macdaddy019967 » Sep 9th, '09, 23:57

da.relapse.lp wrote:Sounds like Suicidal Thoughts by Biggie but less dope.

haha thanks i guess :smoking:
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Re: Suicide

Postby eminemgirl1234 » Sep 14th, '09, 16:17

haha so funny! your really good! :worship:
"Sometimes I feel so alone,
I just don't know, feels like I been down this road before.
So lonely and cold, it's like something takes over me,
soon as I go home and close the door.
Kinda feels like Déjà Vu, I wanna get away from this place I do,
but I can't and I wont say I tried but I know that's a lie cuz I don't,
and why I just don't know...

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