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The First

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The First

Postby eminemgirl1234 » Sep 14th, '09, 16:25

I close my eyes and there we are
in a hotel parking lot
on the roof of your car
hoping it doesn't cave in
dancing slowly
even to the fast songs
you kissed me softly
you said you loved me
you brought tears to my eyes
sometimes you still do
and if I can't be the one
to leave high-heel marks
on your car
on your heart
at least I know
I was the first
Last edited by eminemgirl1234 on Sep 15th, '09, 16:05, edited 1 time in total.
"Sometimes I feel so alone,
I just don't know, feels like I been down this road before.
So lonely and cold, it's like something takes over me,
soon as I go home and close the door.
Kinda feels like Déjà Vu, I wanna get away from this place I do,
but I can't and I wont say I tried but I know that's a lie cuz I don't,
and why I just don't know...

Malina a.k.a Mickey

"Ignorance is your new best friend!"-Paramore
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Re: The First

Postby Wic Kid » Sep 14th, '09, 17:27

Not bad, but you know what could make it better?

Rhyming...
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