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So Over You

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So Over You

Postby eminemgirl1234 » Sep 16th, '09, 16:00

Steam was rising from the hot black tar
As I was making my long trek home
On the last, first day of middle school

Thinking and walking gave me a headache
Like I was suddenly incapable of
Doing 2 things at once

I walked pass your house,
Like you walked pass me in the halls

The way you pretend you don't see me
It makes me sick to my stomach
Like stepping off a spinning carnival ride

I try to block out the year before
And all I can think of is how quickly you forget
As easy as pressing the backspace on your keyboard

So I walked past your house
Like you walked pass me in the halls.
(To you-know-who-you-are and what's-her-face,both of you can burn in hell!) :)
"Sometimes I feel so alone,
I just don't know, feels like I been down this road before.
So lonely and cold, it's like something takes over me,
soon as I go home and close the door.
Kinda feels like Déjà Vu, I wanna get away from this place I do,
but I can't and I wont say I tried but I know that's a lie cuz I don't,
and why I just don't know...

Malina a.k.a Mickey

"Ignorance is your new best friend!"-Paramore
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Re: So Over You

Postby gutawafang » Sep 16th, '09, 16:03

Nice prose.

Although this is cliche:
And all I can think of is how quickly you forget
As easy as pressing the backspace on your keyboard

I still find those lines inspiring. :y:
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Re: So Over You

Postby Fa-Q » Sep 16th, '09, 16:25

Wow lol you should write some more
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Re: So Over You

Postby Yah-hah » Sep 17th, '09, 18:48

It's beautiful for real. The pass your house like you pass me in the hallways is a great line. I dig everything you write
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Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
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Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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