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[Emadyville]

I thought this was pretty awful, structure sucks, rhymes were weak, this wasn't even a song was it just a verse? and whatever metaphors I did see or thought where metaphors were terrible. Overall this was weak, keep practicing tho

sorry if that sounded harsh

[lilrossy]

my metaphors are so complicated
it takes a lifetime to get an applause its

U copied that from one of eminem's freestyles, just changed 6mins to lifetime.

And i agree with Emadyville, it was pretty bad. everything he criticised, jus try and work on them, keep practising.