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Crazy Forever

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Crazy Forever

Postby AOBrien09 » Sep 21st, '09, 17:55

lyric's attackin, critic's backpackin cause my skill's dazz-lin,
an al do this shit forever so hater's start backin up,
actin tough, hatin only cause am surpass-in them,
feel like am kickin them, in the nut's,
but no low blow's just show these hoe's an fuck's,
how to destroy a opponent without gangin up,
so crazy, if am in a horor movie all be stabbin slut's,
oh baby, am the psycopath who's stalkin ya but,
mobb deep said their's no such thing as half way crook's,
so soon as I've did the scene am gonna grab your gut's,
rip them out, am a killer baby you ain't figured that out,
shit's out, if you heared that am'a pull the trigger in your mouth,
on my gun, an that i'l be it your gone, your done,
like lil wayne should be, think an wrong, am stunned,
if you think weezy f and the f is for phenonmal,
ya right, ha only playin you boy like heff ya so damn gullible,

This a quick keystyle to the forever beat :( , a know how a want it to flow but al be surprised if you did :shifty:
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Re: Crazy Forever

Postby lilrossy » Sep 21st, '09, 23:54

i like the rhyme scheme you went with, it's different. it flowed pretty well. overall it was a good read man, keep it up. :y:
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After I came, fucked em with they own leg
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Re: Crazy Forever

Postby gutawafang » Sep 22nd, '09, 04:05

flows well to the beat man. rhyme scheme is dope man. nice. i enjoyed it. :flower:
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Re: Crazy Forever

Postby AOBrien09 » Sep 22nd, '09, 15:54

Thanks lilrossy and gutawafang :flower:
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