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"The Girl"

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"The Girl"

Postby FAME » Sep 26th, '09, 00:32

Broken homes hidden in the shadows of her face
She knows though that she will never fall from her grace
Her body like a vase, she doesn’t want to embrace
He says he will put her in an able brace
So she just tries to erase, the memories in her mind
She just wishes that she could be blind
Hide the scars of her pain of mankind
Her welts and bruises are just confined
Too afraid to tell a friend, she just says she is fine
But really this is just the bottom line
Every single night the same thing, but she can’t decline
She wants someone to notice the signs
Her body once a place of beautiful design
Broken like her spine, she’s gone
Inside she feels like she just wants to move on
But she’s just his pawn
Before she was a swan, and now deteriorated mess
He gets her out of her dress
She puts on a face of distress, as he moves closer
He’s like a horror movie composer, she’s scared
She wishes that someone just cared
He tells her to prepare, tears sweep down her side
She wishes she could hide
She prepares to push down her pride
She wishes she didn’t lie
Its to late she’s tied
Now he sits beside
Ready to ride
She’s ready to die
He’s on the inside
The images she just wish she could put aside, its time
Nothing more than a crime, its done
She wishes it had never begun
She just wants the memories to be undone


Its not about me, I just felt like writing this for some odd reason. But I only write things with meaning, so here is something to think about.
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Re: "The Girl"

Postby lilrossy » Sep 26th, '09, 00:40

i had to read this wearing a snorkel, thats sum deep shit. haha, nah seriously u got sum talent, keep it up. :y:
"Too fatal, unable to crash
Sluts I introduce to anal call me a pain in the ass"
"Got hoes suspicious. Even one peg leg bitches
After I came, fucked em with they own leg
They ain't know the difference"
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Re: "The Girl"

Postby FAME » Sep 26th, '09, 00:44

lilrossy wrote:i had to read this wearing a snorkel, thats sum deep shit. haha, nah seriously u got sum talent, keep it up. :y:


Thanks for the feeback bro. Snorkel?? :o Your by water, and I'm offical jealous now.
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Re: "The Girl"

Postby bullet_boy46 » Sep 26th, '09, 00:55

hell good, really deep stuff here :flower: you have alot of talent :y: also i need some feedback can you check out this rap i wrote called engage :)
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Re: "The Girl"

Postby lilrossy » Sep 26th, '09, 01:32

FAME wrote:
lilrossy wrote:i had to read this wearing a snorkel, thats sum deep shit. haha, nah seriously u got sum talent, keep it up. :y:


Thanks for the feeback bro. Snorkel?? :o Your by water, and I'm offical jealous now.


jus cuz theres water and palm trees, dont necessarily make it a good place to live. its the people. another words, i need to get outa here :'( , haha.
"Too fatal, unable to crash
Sluts I introduce to anal call me a pain in the ass"
"Got hoes suspicious. Even one peg leg bitches
After I came, fucked em with they own leg
They ain't know the difference"
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Re: "The Girl"

Postby FAME » Sep 26th, '09, 02:14

bullet_boy46 wrote:hell good, really deep stuff here :flower: you have alot of talent :y: also i need some feedback can you check out this rap i wrote called engage :)


Thanks for the feedback bullet_boy, I'll surely check it out, and feedback you too.
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FAME wrote:
lilrossy wrote:i had to read this wearing a snorkel, thats sum deep shit. haha, nah seriously u got sum talent, keep it up. :y:


Thanks for the feeback bro. Snorkel?? :o Your by water, and I'm offical jealous now.


jus cuz theres water and palm trees, dont necessarily make it a good place to live. its the people. another words, i need to get outa here :'( , haha.


I feel your pain, I hate this town...even more the town I'm moving to in Decemeber... :'(
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