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Brain-Wash (Unfinished)

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Brain-Wash (Unfinished)

Postby bullet_boy46 » Sep 26th, '09, 02:57

im a eruption, i cause corruption
and disruption in kids minds
my words are blinding
to little jimmys eyes
they fry your kids brain
and stay on there forever
just like a blood stain
i cause so much pain
to your parents pride
they probably cry at night
wishing they died
my brain is like
jeklly and hyde
thats why kids
that listen to me
confide theyselves
in a locked up room
with nothing but food
and pictures of they favorite dude
posted on they wall.

Solace was helping me out Props man :y:

but i decided not to edit it and i want to see what you guys think
Last edited by bullet_boy46 on Sep 26th, '09, 02:58, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: Brain-Wash

Postby Solace » Sep 26th, '09, 02:58

You already know what I think of this, and after what I taught you I wanna see what you drop with what you know now.
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Re: Brain-Wash

Postby bullet_boy46 » Sep 26th, '09, 02:59

Solace wrote:You already know what I think of this, and after what I taught you I wanna see what you drop with what you know now.

aww fine..lol
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Re: Brain-Wash

Postby Solace » Sep 26th, '09, 03:01

bullet_boy46 wrote:
Solace wrote:You already know what I think of this, and after what I taught you I wanna see what you drop with what you know now.

aww fine..lol

Lol I didnt mean I want you to edit this I'm just saying I'll be patiently waiting to see what you come up with what you know now ;)
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Re: Brain-Wash

Postby bullet_boy46 » Sep 26th, '09, 03:07

Solace wrote:
bullet_boy46 wrote:
Solace wrote:You already know what I think of this, and after what I taught you I wanna see what you drop with what you know now.

aww fine..lol

Lol I didnt mean I want you to edit this I'm just saying I'll be patiently waiting to see what you come up with what you know now ;)

ohh lol
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