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Postby bullet_boy46 » Sep 26th, '09, 04:51

Third Attempt At Rap :flower: FEEDBACK PLEASE :happy:

tick-tock, i be readying my glock
im ready to cock it and and lock it
and put it in my fucking pocket
once it hits 9 o' clock the glock goes bang
i aint part of no freaking chain gang
but i talk this fucking sweet slang
im more exsplosive then the big-bang
cause when i spit rhymes, the bells chime
and the time is probably half past nine
six times the rhymes, commiting crimes
counting shit like nickles and dimes
my rhymes are sweeter then lemons n limes
the light shines on me like a thousand times
but i turn it down and get a frown on my face
you betta brace cause in case you didnt know
my flow kills you in this little rap game show.
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Re: Tick-Tock

Postby Solace » Sep 26th, '09, 05:04

Improving bro, you followed what I taught you :flower:
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Re: Tick-Tock

Postby bullet_boy46 » Sep 26th, '09, 05:05

Solace wrote:Improving bro, you followed what I taught you :flower:

hard as hell to for me for some reason but i guess thats what improving is thanks :flower:
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Postby Solace » Sep 26th, '09, 05:06

bullet_boy46 wrote:
Solace wrote:Improving bro, you followed what I taught you :flower:

hard as hell to for me for some reason but i guess thats what improving is thanks :flower:

Didnt mention how impressive this is for a 3rd try too :y:
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Re: Tick-Tock

Postby bullet_boy46 » Sep 26th, '09, 05:08

Solace wrote:
bullet_boy46 wrote:
Solace wrote:Improving bro, you followed what I taught you :flower:

hard as hell to for me for some reason but i guess thats what improving is thanks :flower:

Didnt mention how impressive this is for a 3rd try too :y:

thanks :D
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Postby Tranquil » Sep 26th, '09, 06:41

tick-tock, i be readying my glock (love that line, lol) Keep it up man
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Postby FAME » Sep 26th, '09, 20:10

damn! Your really improving fast. Keeping following what Solace has taught you. :y:
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Re: Tick-Tock

Postby bullet_boy46 » Sep 26th, '09, 21:43

$(@TTY B@Y wrote:that was good for a 3rd time. you know what you should try and do? you should try and write a rap about something that has happened in your life/something you want to get off your chest/your feelings or whatever. sometimes that's all it takes to spark the fire that you need to produce excellent work.

thanks i see what yo mean to
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Postby Drama Setter » Sep 26th, '09, 22:03

really good for the third experience bro , I like your flow . So solace is the teacher :shifty:

im more exsplosive then the big-bang
cause when i spit rhymes, the bells chime
and the time is probably half past nine
six times the rhymes, commiting crimes
counting shit like nickles and dimes
my rhymes are sweeter then lemons n limes
the light shines on me like a thousand tim


donig good :y:
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Re: Tick-Tock

Postby Fa-Q » Sep 27th, '09, 05:16

Gooooood flow man...lyrics were good...more multis tho...I jizz for multis
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