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Hip-Hop Savants ( 'Lab Oratory )

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Re: Hip-Hop Savants ( 'Lab Oratory )

Postby classthe_king » Sep 27th, '09, 15:54

I thought this was good, but not great. Ive seen better from all of you. Coleon you had the best verse with some dope lines. The only time your flow was off on that lamens jack line. Overall good, just nothing special.

And you guys need to get on the same page with who's on the song :laughing: I think Emzee mentioned Infinte Renegade twice and Guta mentioned solace and renegade.

And coleon, you ever goona pm me back?
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Hip-Hop Savants ( 'Lab Oratory )

Postby DƎRDYPK » Sep 27th, '09, 16:17

god damn!!!! :worship:
that was freezy fresh :y:
Emzee Frenzy opened up the written real nice
"so this is it, cole,fish,renegade and me / drinkin coke and rum with lemonade and tea" love it :y:
Fish had some really nice rhymes going on the 2nd verse my favorite bar was
"Jump up and down like chimpanzees, this is righter than the Price is Right / This is bigger than the Fords and the trips for three days and two nights"
Cole you had some really funky fresh rhymes going on
"our principals are integral, rock solid through this hazy game / our blaze and flame like MSN cause it's takin AIM"
where do you come up with rhymes like that son? :smoking:
this piece was dope i give it 4 hundred & 20 :y: 's up
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Re: Hip-Hop Savants ( 'Lab Oratory )

Postby J Roc » Sep 27th, '09, 18:20

I read random parts ... Shit was Neat tho .. hahhha i'll read the whole thing when i'm in the moood. Bravo
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Re: Hip-Hop Savants ( 'Lab Oratory )

Postby emzee-frenzy » Sep 28th, '09, 06:53

fuck, i thought renegade is gon be in here, that kinda sucks, well anyway, nice verses guys, and yeah class i agree with you on the behalf of my verse, it's average cause i'm rusty, took a few weeks break and know i wrote that , props to cole and fish.
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throat slitting bitches in public then start killing witnesses" - emzee
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Re: Hip-Hop Savants ( 'Lab Oratory )

Postby Solace » Sep 28th, '09, 22:38

Pretty good, chorus was fire and so were Gutawafang and Coleons verses but on the real Emzee thought yours was real weak, start off decent then only went down.
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