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General Cumulonimbus

Postby mcZu » Oct 2nd, '09, 00:25

Yes, the Storm is back.

Beat used.

I’ll leave ya brain dead like Don Self in thee truck
My lines will cover head shots like Before I Self Destruct
So before the shelf adjusts..
I’ll add just enough pressure to put it up.. trust
Me I’m not The Postal Service so I could never Give Up
Must.. I go Tupac on ya body and Keep Ya Head Up
While the guillotine makes sure ya body drops?
See, I’m part of a killer team that’s cold
Your as tight as a pussy.. that’s old
I’ll make sure you body breaks up like the Pussy Cat Dolls
You be catching a cold or a flu when I’m around
Zu’s vocals equal heaven sounds
You couldn’t get hard if you were Emily from Seven Pounds
This is like a match ending in a seven seconds round
When I hear their lyrics I understand why I was born with the crown
I put on MTV and then I frown
I guess I’m writing Lost Symbols so call me Dan Brown
"Truth is limitless in its range; if you drop a 'T' and look at it in reverse, it could hurt."
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Re: General Cumulonimbus

Postby classthe_king » Oct 2nd, '09, 01:06

I couldn't figure out how you flowed to that beat at all, but I know that you probably know how to. I thought this was good, but not as good as some of the stuff you've been putting out recently. Rhymes were kind of basic, and you had some good punches, and you had some ok punches.
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Re: General Cumulonimbus

Postby Fa-Q » Oct 2nd, '09, 01:15

haha that BISD line was funny....good drop Zu
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Re: General Cumulonimbus

Postby mcZu » Oct 2nd, '09, 23:40

classthe_king wrote:I couldn't figure out how you flowed to that beat at all, but I know that you probably know how to. I thought this was good, but not as good as some of the stuff you've been putting out recently. Rhymes were kind of basic, and you had some good punches, and you had some ok punches.


Yeah, the flow was a stop & go type of flow. Thanks, appreciate it man. :b: :b:

Fa-Q wrote:haha that BISD line was funny....good drop Zu


Hahaha, thanks man, appreciate it. :b: :b:
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Re: General Cumulonimbus

Postby Yah-hah » Oct 5th, '09, 07:19

Took awhile to get the flow but once I re-read it and started flowing to it I understood it. Good drop though man always educatin the public huh :p
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Re: General Cumulonimbus

Postby mcZu » Oct 5th, '09, 20:56

Yah-hah wrote:Took awhile to get the flow but once I re-read it and started flowing to it I understood it. Good drop though man always educatin the public huh :p

Hahaha, thanks Yah. Appreciate it. :b:
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