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Re: It'Z Mine

Postby Solace » Oct 7th, '09, 01:34

Pretty dope, you've done TONS a LOT better but I can't deny it was a nice verse. Flow was dope as fuck in certain parts and in others just plain average. Like the way I flowed on:

in the game, just display and enchant
rookie, on these foundations i stand
sound blazin, i rant, seekin a balance
MC 1st , the fingers bleedin an calloused


Was so much better compared to:

blind optics, speak free, keep it real
Coleon, I'm my own Achilles heel
bleed and heal, true tricks of the trade
try to blaze, amaze, i'll spit in ya flame



But yeah that's all I can really complain about, good drop.
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Re: It'Z Mine

Postby gutawafang » Oct 7th, '09, 01:36

I love the chorus! :)
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Re: It'Z Mine

Postby Yah-hah » Oct 7th, '09, 05:20

Yeah man done better but was still hot man
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

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Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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