Generally Speaking

[Spyder]

Listen as we continuously put you in submission, ‘jumpstart’ you bitches
You bout to witness the illest to rip ‘apart’ the ‘heart’ of the defenseless.
Stop ‘tryin’ we ‘denyin’ your friendships, six-lunatics with maneuvered-hits
Usin-tricks of ‘lyrics’ do you ‘hear-its’ power that we move-you-wit?
We not new-to-this, we holdin-up the golden-gloves like no-one-does
Cause we over-and-above the ‘times-wit’ ‘rhymes-sick’ like we throwin-up.
You hear ‘masterpieces’ when this ‘craft-releases’ the talent-we-have
Im glad-to-be-back the generals bout to give you a reality-smack.
To snap back at fags poppin-off at the jaws you best be knockin-it-off
Or these beast be knockin your jaws off till you aint talkin-at-all.
We here to teach, we wrote the text books and bagin-your-lunches
Stabin-in-stomachs to cause more pain to guts than abdomen-crunches.
You mad-but-you-love-it, your chest poundin like a drum-to-your-heart
Spit the last verse first, backwards, so you were done-from-the-start.
We bum rushin and ‘blitzin’ to better our ‘position’ we came-for-a-challenge
We flipped shit upside down and none of you can regain-your-balance.

[classthe_king]

*Gives Love*

[Spyder]

hahahaha more to say would be nice lol


seriously i worked hard on this one, alot of complexity and multies with great punchlines


DONT SLEEPP

[classthe_king]

Hahahahaha, for real though, this was dope. Although not as good as that last verse you posted. I could see the effort you put into the complextiy. I thought this was the best bar.
You mad-but-you-love-it, your chest poundin like a drum-to-your-heart
Spit the last verse first, backwards, so you were done-from-the-start. Excpecially that line.

[Spyder]

thanks man, yeah thats really the only complexity i consintrated on lol

but i deff think better than my last peice... more substance

[classthe_king]

Haha, i dont know if it was your last drop or not, but that Where Ive Been verse was sick.

[Spyder]

ahah well thanks man

[Solace]

Damn this was beast...I loved the flow and multies and the internal rhymes. Shit was dope as hell

[Yah-hah]

Oh man fire homie for real I see complexity in the whole thing

[J Roc]

Straight Flames

Spit the last-verse first back-wards, so you were done-from-the-start.

Damn Dude .... lol

[Spyder]

thanks for the feed everyone
and yeah i know what u mean amadeo, i do that to
ill try to work on that more

[classthe_king]

i think the structue only seems off because of all the dashes and quotations. It makes it hard to read, but i think the strucutre is fine.