i'ts okay for a first act, and shabbymind your verse's whack, talking bout he gonn burst back and turn into a laughing stock, man your rap is stuck trying to pretend but your acting sucks.
give the guy a break, man you need some multies and some better rhyme schemes, keep writing.
No hate shabby.
My first rap ever
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Re: My first rap ever
by emzee-frenzy » Oct 20th, '09, 11:29
"misoginistic mysteries missunderstood by missing mistresses,
throat slitting bitches in public then start killing witnesses" - emzee
throat slitting bitches in public then start killing witnesses" - emzee
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