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It Is...Truth

Postby Solace » Oct 22nd, '09, 21:28

[Verse 1]
So though the night is silent, the dark is storming in my mind,
Permanent writer's block, I fear the fog flooring all my lines,
Emotions asunder, feel anger and sadness under the pressure,
Though the sun is bright I'm feeling quite under the weather,
This shit is pointless...Don't fuckin' get why I keep coming back,
Rapping about snatching fame and fortune from them other cats,
Running laps down memory lane, all of my memories framed,
Everyday never not ever refrain from keeping my energy tamed,
My mentality's crackdown, and wow sadly I've backed down,
Fuckin' take my heart and burn it, I'm surrounded by black clouds,
Don't wanna fuckin' deal with this, is this damn pain even worth it?
I'm looking into the mirror and noticing just what is worthless,
Look at life in my eyes, talking to myself, whispering "Go die",
I may be sent straight to the heavens and yet my soul don't rise,
Something has changed and there is no way I can fix it,
Brain was sent down a set of spiral steps and landed twisted.

[Chorus x2]
Should I be tortured and get scorched by this riveting hate?
Should I simply give up and walk right into Oblivions gate?
Just a million ways to give up this day and give into fate,
Tthe fact is I feel like I'm being pulled into two different ways,

[Verse 2]
How would you feel if you were dazed, and simply amazed,
When you find a day when you ain't want to die hanging from wires, hey,
Or just finally fuckin' figuring for once you live a life without reason,
You try to kill youself and just wake up with ya mouth bleeding,
I am immune to happiness, and so you fools I'm rapping this,
For those who feel the same way as if you were trapped in shit,
Wishin' for some gats to split ya body, self-hatred yeah you love it,
Was thinking about finishing this verse, yeah then I said fuck it.

[Chorus x2]
Should I be tortured and get scorched by this riveting hate?
Should I simply give up and walk right into Oblivion's gate?
Just a million ways to give up this day and give into fate,
The fact is I feel like I'm being pulled into two different ways,
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Re: It Is...Truth

Postby classthe_king » Oct 22nd, '09, 21:55

Dang liked this piece. Thought the chorus was great, verses were great, wish the second one was a little longer though.
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Re: It Is...Truth

Postby mcZu » Oct 23rd, '09, 01:00

classthe_king wrote:Dang liked this piece. Thought the chorus was great, verses were great, wish the second one was a little longer though.

Pretty much what Class said. Keep it up Omar, keep doing your thing.
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Re: It Is...Truth

Postby Solace » Oct 23rd, '09, 21:51

Thanks you two. :worship:
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Re: It Is...Truth

Postby DƎRDYPK » Oct 24th, '09, 04:26

thats dope bro :y:
loving the multies & the flow :b:
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Re: It Is...Truth

Postby Solace » Oct 24th, '09, 04:28

Thanks PK :worship:
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Re: It Is...Truth

Postby gutawafang » Oct 24th, '09, 05:26

Loving the scheme and of course the dope multis. :8)

I totally dig this song man.

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Re: It Is...Truth

Postby Tash8 » Oct 24th, '09, 05:50

pretty good, good rhyming, the chorus is good, it's overall good but idk i cna't rap it, i tried to but i ccouldn't
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Re: It Is...Truth

Postby Solace » Oct 24th, '09, 17:53

Thanks you two, I appreciate it :flower:
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