This Be My Mission

[Cookzee]

hey, this verse is something a little different than my usual bullshit lol, but i felt like i had to define who i am and everything so i thought i'd share this verse, i think it opens a whole to window for me tbh, if you've seen my older verses, u'll see there not anything like this, and everyone told me to get more complex, so i think i may have done that with this one, anyway give me some constructive feedback, theres always room for improvement

i'm defined through my ink
that i use on the page
im confused is it true
theres a muse to my rage
i use it to sway
any views that stand in my way
display a sense of venom in me
when i go on the stage
and be renegades
they be like dude is a great
i'll be his fan until the day
that his music'll fade
but it's theraputic
so who's to say
and who's to make
them kinda statements
and portray me as crazed
this is the very reason im a radio waves
defending my side, fighting gays who isn't straight
theres a misconception bout my affection
i only have love for one girl, her illuminant gaze
could light up a room quicker than a rocket could blaze
the faces off of the spotters, and fly up to space
but if it takes me to be non existent
for ya'll to listen shit that's what i'll do , make that my mission!

[gutawafang]

you didnt have to underline and bold your words. it's confusing to read imo.

strucutre could be improved.

lyricism wise, you have good vocab. at least.

i see some punches also. or maybe they're metaphors. i dunno.

nevertheless, keep writing homie.

[Cookzee]

thanks, i could of spent time putting it in perfect structure but cba lol

[Cookzee]

bump

[MC Anonymous]

You don't know what the fuck your talking about. First you say things about loving a girl then you talk about beating gays? Then you talk about how dope you are, however that has nothing to do with anything being mentioned at all......

Keep writing, but make sure you know what you're talking about before you write another piece, grasp a concept and run with it. Also, remember to keep it going.....

[Cookzee]

i do know what im talking about because it is my life, none of that shit is made up :L
first off, when im saying im fighting gays, im on on about people who are trying to pick a fight when im on the radio, because where im from, we have a local radio that stretches over the county, u can call in there, and this dude called in a started beefing with one of my songs but he didn't have his facts straight and lost straight away hence, fighting gays, who aint straight, it's a play on words
and there is rumours going around about my track record with women and appaz i've got like 5 on the go but i've only got eyes for one girl

hope tht cleared some shit up