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Postby classthe_king » Oct 28th, '09, 19:33

Wrote this in like 20 minutes. Very early rough draft, just wanted to get some feed on it.

Way back when the only approval i wanted was J-Maks
I would pray that they liked me so when i displayed raps
They betrayed that trust from when i had convey facts
Then when they went out to do drugs I stayed back
And laid tracks and before i knew it I had gave rap
A straight path to my heart and soul, you better believe it
Hip hop, i need it, it runs through my blood I bleed it
I've defeated this contender, but the aftermath is damagin
It tore me apart, I couldn't stand it when Taylor Hamilton
Picked another motherfuckin man again, damn this pen
Was the only thing keeping my emotions packed in
A cold blooded assassin, left alone so he stuck to rappin
And trapped in all the rage n anger before he lashed out
At every stupid mother fucker that didn't back down
You laugh now but it's the only thing keeping me alive
And the only thing stopping me from reaching for this nine
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Hip-Hop

Postby Relapse.LP » Oct 28th, '09, 22:57

Not bad. Not bad at all; an improvement from your previous work definitely, in terms of rhyming. :y:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Hip-Hop

Postby mcZu » Oct 28th, '09, 23:22

I liked it, nice way of visualizing what you wanted to portray. Flowed smoothly and lyrically it was good, keep it up Sentus.
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Re: Hip-Hop

Postby classthe_king » Oct 29th, '09, 01:36

thanks both of you :worship:
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Hip-Hop

Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » Oct 29th, '09, 02:28

real talk..good piece....................
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