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Re: just 4 bars..

Postby gutawafang » Nov 4th, '09, 11:39

with lines that can light the sky like they're Morse codable :y:

and I see cool multis. :)
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Re: just 4 bars..

Postby Wic Kid » Nov 4th, '09, 14:07

with lines that can light the sky like they're Morse codable

That was a cool line. And I liked that rhyme scheme. Overall :y:
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Re: just 4 bars..

Postby Solace » Nov 8th, '09, 22:11

Didnt like the slant rhymes here and there but it was iight. And why just 4 bars smh?

Best part:

i wanna be divorced from all your forced multiples
with lines that are notable as Source quotables
with rhymes fit for universities, course loadable
with lines that can light the sky like they're Morse codable
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Re: just 4 bars..

Postby Yah-hah » Nov 10th, '09, 06:45

^^^^ Yeah man dope line. Why so short. But I understand what your saying man. Nice message in a short simple drop. Stay droppin man
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Re: just 4 bars..

Postby lilrossy » Nov 10th, '09, 09:33

yea man, nice drop. really liked the first 2 lines. :y: :y:
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