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First Verse on a Song About Bre

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First Verse on a Song About Bre

Postby Fa-Q » Nov 18th, '09, 01:52

I'm going to soon write,
a song that you can only see when we dance in the moon light,
Ill dance with my two left feet,
Even if there's no where to dance, except street,
Put my right hand on your waist, hold your left hand,
I ask you when you stole my heart, was theft planned,
Every single time I look in her-eyes,
I'm pleasantly shook and sur-prised,
Your pierced tongue, pierces my inner core,
Each song I write her, makes me want to send her more,
But my broken heart, is already tender and sore,
Every time its broken, I'm a defender in a war,
Losing every time, its so hard to win,
I guess I'm scared of being scarred again,
But if there's ever a time, our lips meet,
When you knock me off me balance, and you trip my feet,
Revive me, when my heart skips a beat,
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Re: First Verse on a Song About Bre

Postby Just Silver » Nov 18th, '09, 02:01

Real nice drop :y:
always feel weird reading stuff when its about love :unsure:
dont know why

Line of choice:I ask you when you stole my heart, was theft planned,

Liked the flow overall nice piece :b:
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Re: First Verse on a Song About Bre

Postby D'Leh » Nov 18th, '09, 02:05

nice drop man, good flow and structure i love it!!!
Let me eat your pussy while I shave you!
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Re: First Verse on a Song About Bre

Postby Fa-Q » Nov 18th, '09, 02:55

Thanks EmSilver and D'leh
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Re: First Verse on a Song About Bre

Postby Fa-Q » Nov 18th, '09, 17:09

3m1n3m Silver wrote:Real nice drop :y:
always feel weird reading stuff when its about love :unsure:
dont know why

Line of choice:I ask you when you stole my heart, was theft planned,

Liked the flow overall nice piece :b:

Why is it weird for you to read love songs lol
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